Brown Eyes Lie

Brown Eyes Lie

A Poem by Lexi Richard

I'll never see brown eyes the same
not since my gaze met yours
they no longer seem sweet to me,
but sour to the core 

I cannot love them into rhymes
because they haunt my sleep
I could see your brown eyes shine
while my brown eyes would weep 

Your loving eyes sure had me fooled,
my heart they would divide
when you said "I don't feel the same"
I learned brown eyes could lie

- lr

© 2018 Lexi Richard


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Apart from the fact that "longer" in Line 3 (if your intention was to have a distinct rhythm) landed on the wrong syLABle, this is so good. The flow, the message, the ending - absolute brilliance! Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lexi Richard

1 Year Ago

Just tweaked it a bit, thank you!
emipoemi

1 Year Ago

the "longer" is still landing wrong.....it works in another way, but if your intention is to have a .. read more

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