Half-Hearted

I'm not a doll, 

a deck of cards,

or loaded BB gun

I have a name,

thoughts and a brain, 

I'm more than just for fun

I'm sick of men

who think of me

as half of what they are

don't think that I

owe the galaxy

when you give me one star 

I put in

what I want out

yet you don't pull your weight

I don't deserve

half of your heart

when I would give you eight

- lr

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

This is write about breaking barriers, and stereotypical thoughts . I loved the frees spirit put in very simple words :)

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[emipoemi]

I'll say it again: you got power in your endings, my friend! This is amazing. And I love the structure (good break from the quatrains). For musicality purposes, Stanza 1 Line 3 should have an "a" slipped into it ("or A loaded BB gun" - great image, though, absolute brilliance), and Stanza 2 Line 6 should have a "just" ("when you give me JUST one star"); and should Stanza 2 Line 5 say "own" or do you actually mean "owe"? Just wondering. Other than that, this, I think, is up there as one of your best (IF not your absolute best). Stanza 2 as a whole is phenomenal, and like I said, the ending puts everything over the top. Well freaking done!

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much! Also, yes, I meant owe.

[emipoemi]

ok, cool. I was feeling an "own" vibe, which is why I wanted to confirm.
And you're very welcome! My pleasure.

[Lexi Richard]

I meant it like "just because you gave me this one thing doesn't mean that I owe you so much more in return" if that makes sense? Kind of angsty.

[emipoemi]

Yeah, I understood it once you confirmed that it was "owe"....I also realized that the line read "the" when I had read it as "a", which also made me confused on whether it was supposed to be "own". Yeah, I got it now with that confirmation.