Half-Hearted

Half-Hearted

A Poem by Lexi Richard

I'm not a doll, 
a deck of cards,
or loaded BB gun
I have a name,
thoughts and a brain, 
I'm more than just for fun

I'm sick of men
who think of me
as half of what they are
don't think that I
owe the galaxy
when you give me one star 

I put in
what I want out
yet you don't pull your weight
I don't deserve
half of your heart
when I would give you eight

- lr

© 2018 Lexi Richard


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This is write about breaking barriers, and stereotypical thoughts . I loved the frees spirit put in very simple words :)

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Posted 1 Year Ago


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This is write about breaking barriers, and stereotypical thoughts . I loved the frees spirit put in very simple words :)

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Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'll say it again: you got power in your endings, my friend! This is amazing. And I love the structure (good break from the quatrains). For musicality purposes, Stanza 1 Line 3 should have an "a" slipped into it ("or A loaded BB gun" - great image, though, absolute brilliance), and Stanza 2 Line 6 should have a "just" ("when you give me JUST one star"); and should Stanza 2 Line 5 say "own" or do you actually mean "owe"? Just wondering. Other than that, this, I think, is up there as one of your best (IF not your absolute best). Stanza 2 as a whole is phenomenal, and like I said, the ending puts everything over the top. Well freaking done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


emipoemi

1 Year Ago

ok, cool. I was feeling an "own" vibe, which is why I wanted to confirm.
And you're very welc.. read more
Lexi Richard

1 Year Ago

I meant it like "just because you gave me this one thing doesn't mean that I owe you so much more in.. read more
emipoemi

1 Year Ago

Yeah, I understood it once you confirmed that it was "owe"....I also realized that the line read "th.. read more

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