rotary phone

pieces

Out of the molten river,
and into the first mold that would have me.

I am the hammer that dreamt
of being a sword

Reviews

[theludus]

I really like the inventiveness of the first section.

I wouldn't say I am in love with the second section only because after that unique persepective in the beginning it's a little bit of a come down the read the hammer sword deal but for what it conveys it's really good and I also love the tension of something like a hammer which is used to create - wanting to be a sword which is more like a creation..... also a tool.... but that's beside the point.

Actually, it makes me think of love and our human nature, like it takes someone else to make us feel like we are something else, so that's sad, the hammer, capable of creating the sword- never seeing its beauty.

So. I really do appreciate that good work in such a short poem. Excellent from you.

[Donald Meikle]

Finely tempered
Rotary phones with on line rings
So much more fun than now

[Dr. Wood ?]

ha...quite brilliant....I LOVED it.....I am still dreaming of finding another melting pot

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Another interesting piece... I see genius in your ideas, especially here, they just need a little bit "more" I think in terms of internal explanation. You are masterful when it comes to language and the ability to manipulate images...wow...i'm completely impressed with your "style".

[Chris]

unique and has me still thinking of why I like it.

[Libby McKeown]

needs work, just a whim that needs fine tuning

[Emily B]

oh, lovely