Crying Over A Bowl of Soup

I've recently gone through something tough. And the idea came to me as I was drinking a bowl of soup. I started writing immediately, and this is what happened.

Crying over a bowl of soup

May ruin its flavor.

Ingredients so carefully prepared 

Offset by salty tears.

They say when you cook with too much salt,

It means you're in love.

If so, I must be deep under,

Because I sit here at the table,

Alone with an empty bowl,

With the trace of salty soup on the outline of my lips. 

Author's Note

I write poems once in a while, this is the first one I have on writerscafe. Feedback would be nice, but feel free to just read. I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

that's again an amazin' write, but"cryin' over a bowl of soup"...quite different tittle, but words's're pretty...i'm confused is that came from your real life...?

[Libby Carsons]

thank you, and yes, it was influenced from real life

[Wórdsmíth]

yeah, i got already, just i was clarifyin', there's depth inside your each words, n i got, wow, that's really a wonderful write...i'm waitin' for your next lovely write to read... good luck for your next write...

[River Page]

This is super unique! It conveys a really cool image. I can see this as a scene in some sort of Gothic Suspense book. Reminds me of The Thirteenth Tale by Diane Setterfield. Anyway, nice work!

[Libby Carsons]

Thanks! I really appreciate it :)

[Ace]

Nice flash, very beautiful, but i think you are/were in love & crying to remember his memories with a cup of sup sit near by the pool or table. I said because i imagined it from your poem. I felt happy or bad but i really feel your poetric words. I hope now you are well. I wish i would read your more work.

[Libby Carsons]

Thank you for the feedback, yes, I am okay, thanks very much for the review and read!

[Acer]

My pleasure ;-')

[junaid altaf]

the creative part has been smartly done!!!
tears are salty!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Libby Carsons]

thanks for the read!

[junaid altaf]

your welcome

[Nick.B]

Interesting how you managed to put these two things together, soup and crying...great write

[Libby Carsons]

thank you!

[beautiful dreamer]

it was very good for your first one posted! i liked it. very free verse. i am usually not a free verse person but you made it work!

[Libby Carsons]

thanks so muchh!!

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Yeah.........offcourese....i did enjoy...............i liked here your few line...
"alone with an empty bowl......
with the trace of salty soup on the outline of my lips....."
nice line....you know what when i was readin it....i was just making view's of your poem.....you 've suited your word's with your tittle.....but don't you think that it's quite low......i mean....it's much shorter..........i wannna read it more..........so........i think you should have to continue it...........
anyway....i liked+loved = enjoyed it ............i think you've putted here reality....i meant....you 've converted here reality into your poetric word's...........

when i was reading it...........i was thinking that what you were thinking when you were writing this poem..........so....if you don't mind then may i've ask you that how did you get the idea/title of the poem......????????? (honestly asking...)

[Libby Carsons]

I really appreciate you taking the time to review my poem! thanks so much for the feedback, as for the short length, it was on purpose, I wanted it to be short and simple, and I like readers wanting more, I think that's why I made it super short.
As for the influence of the poem, to be honest, it was actually happening. I was sitting alone at the table drinking a bowl of soup, heartbroken. And I realized how normal and boring it is to be drinking soup, but with the heartbreak, its much more raw and human and the moment suddenly became so alive and beautiful to me. So I wanted to capture the moment in a few words...I hope that makes sense?

[.]

yeah...it makes sense & i've got that sense. :-)

[Kitt]

Very nice. I like the picture you got in my head.

[Libby Carsons]

thank you so much!