Crying Over A Bowl of Soup

Crying Over A Bowl of Soup

A Poem by Libby Carsons
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I've recently gone through something tough. And the idea came to me as I was drinking a bowl of soup. I started writing immediately, and this is what happened.

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Crying over a bowl of soup
May ruin its flavor.
Ingredients so carefully prepared 
Offset by salty tears.
They say when you cook with too much salt,
It means you're in love.
If so, I must be deep under,
Because I sit here at the table,
Alone with an empty bowl,
With the trace of salty soup on the outline of my lips. 

© 2013 Libby Carsons


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Libby Carsons
I write poems once in a while, this is the first one I have on writerscafe. Feedback would be nice, but feel free to just read. I hope you enjoy.

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that's again an amazin' write, but"cryin' over a bowl of soup"...quite different tittle, but words's're pretty...i'm confused is that came from your real life...?

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

thank you, and yes, it was influenced from real life
Wórdsmíth

8 Years Ago

yeah, i got already, just i was clarifyin', there's depth inside your each words, n i got, wow, that.. read more
This is super unique! It conveys a really cool image. I can see this as a scene in some sort of Gothic Suspense book. Reminds me of The Thirteenth Tale by Diane Setterfield. Anyway, nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

Thanks! I really appreciate it :)
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Ace
Nice flash, very beautiful, but i think you are/were in love & crying to remember his memories with a cup of sup sit near by the pool or table. I said because i imagined it from your poem. I felt happy or bad but i really feel your poetric words. I hope now you are well. I wish i would read your more work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the feedback, yes, I am okay, thanks very much for the review and read!
Acer

8 Years Ago

My pleasure ;-')
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the creative part has been smartly done!!!
tears are salty!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

thanks for the read!
junaid altaf

8 Years Ago

your welcome
Interesting how you managed to put these two things together, soup and crying...great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

thank you!
it was very good for your first one posted! i liked it. very free verse. i am usually not a free verse person but you made it work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

thanks so muchh!!
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Yeah.........offcourese....i did enjoy...............i liked here your few line...
"alone with an empty bowl......
with the trace of salty soup on the outline of my lips....."
nice line....you know what when i was readin it....i was just making view's of your poem.....you 've suited your word's with your tittle.....but don't you think that it's quite low......i mean....it's much shorter..........i wannna read it more..........so........i think you should have to continue it...........
anyway....i liked+loved = enjoyed it ............i think you've putted here reality....i meant....you 've converted here reality into your poetric word's...........

when i was reading it...........i was thinking that what you were thinking when you were writing this poem..........so....if you don't mind then may i've ask you that how did you get the idea/title of the poem......????????? (honestly asking...)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

I really appreciate you taking the time to review my poem! thanks so much for the feedback, as for t.. read more
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8 Years Ago

yeah...it makes sense & i've got that sense. :-)
Very nice. I like the picture you got in my head.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Libby Carsons

8 Years Ago

thank you so much!

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Added on January 31, 2013
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Libby Carsons
Libby Carsons

Brooklyn, NY



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I'm a student studying in New York, studying interior design and trying to find the meaning of passion. On what it really means to feel it, to be affected by it. Wondering if writing is my passion. I.. more..

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