Blinking

 All the rings of truth in trees

Exhaust the shame that sees

So many steps from home

From when at first we roam

It's only ways of rhyme

In tear blind days of time

As all the years go round

Unmeasured until downed

Reviews

[Gandré]

I like this minimalistic treasure. Youth, beauty, glances, juicy lips and marble wrists - all will be gone... "unmeasured until downed", as you say. I liked this one a lot! Hope all is well with you and yours. Merry Christmas, Donald and say hello to your dear wife.

[Emily B]

the sun is shining, your words are lovely, what am I doing sitting here, when I could be out there walking?

thanks for the inspiration!

[cest la vie]

and time rolls on and on doesn't it?

Beautiful write...

[J.P. Bristow]

That first line was so engaging..so lovely...so visceral. Really well written Donald seriously a great write

[C. Harter Amos]

I liked the idea of comparing the passing of time to time being locked into the rings of trees until they're cut and the rings show. Time passes with tears and smiles, mistakes and accomplishments. Really a nice piece with seamless rhyme. A lot said in so few lines!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Reading this is like getting a natural high... the upbeat flow and positive feel make for a fun buzz.

[Narnie]

Sheesh, I'd forgotten how wonderful you do this poetry thing. I love the message behind this - the travel of time and the sweet sadness. The title just makes it for me. Perfect.

[Pepsimax]

very poetic, the last two lines are really good and the title fits in with the poem, loved it.