Shotgun

Short little poem I wrote about the first girl I ever really fell for.

Shotgun. My heart is at the drivers seat, and yours has called shotgun Right next to mine. As I try to drive away from true feelings, push every heart to the backseat...the trunk...or even a hit and run Yours called shotgun And there you were, Right next to mine. Now here is the dilemma I face Trying not to let your heart move over to the drivers seat And take control of the wheel

Author's Note

I know this was short, and not my best. I wrote in the middle of English senior year when I was bored. Thank you though for reading, I appreciate all feedback so much.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

Now that is an interesting way to describe your first love or the beginning of new love. Very creative outlook.

[Lindsay Hope]

Thank you so much!

[TheLastEclipse]

Honestly, I have never heard diction used like this. I think its appealing in its uniqueness. Most people don't include modern terms when writing poems, so referring to driving is an interesting turn. Great job, madam.

[Lindsay Hope]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate that :)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Honestly, sometimes the shortest poems are all you need. I really like the metaphor of a car ride, and of course someone would shout "shotgun" to ride the front passenger seat. I also like the last two lines, the idea of your passenger (in this case, a loving partner) not to try to take over the wheel totally. I think that's clever.

[Lindsay Hope]

Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate it!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

unique and powerful.
i like your approach, very interesting.
nice job!
i liked it!
:)

[Lindsay Hope]

Thank you so much, Pushkar!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome. :)