Endless Path

This is a short poem I wrote a few minutes ago. It's pretty abstract, but I hope you enjoy it.

The winding path stretches out in front of me,

Vines and cobblestone, as far as the eye can see. 

Lush tropical trees stand proudly on each side,

With thick wooden trunks, nearly a meter wide.

My footsteps are heavy, dragging each toe,

It's as if my legs don't know where to go.

What is the purpose, why the big fight?

All I want is my soul, for once, to feel light.

But it's hard, when the path has no end,

My eyes don't see a single road bend.

It's just step after step, keep on walking,

Even when the nature around me is talking.

I keep on going, towards that light,

The golden rays are shining, the promise is bright.

I don't slow down, hoping that then,

Maybe the path will have meaning again. 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we seem we are walking in circles. Hard to judge what we done and where we are going. I like the logic of the poem.
"I keep on going, towards that light,
The golden rays are shining, the promise is bright."
Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Miranda Richard]

I love this too! Wow, you are so good! I'm jealous.

[afra]

i love the flow of ur poetry

[MoriartyMesa]

Not too sure if you ever heard of the band, Dixie's Midnight Runners. But this sort of has the same flow.



Nice job kid.

[ThIsDaRkRoAdToNoWhErE]

I totally love this poem, it's so awesome!! :D I can completely relate to it in many ways. I've walked down so many roads, tracks, and old, haunted pathways in my lifetime as well, and it just sucks when pretty much everywhere I turn, there's a dead end somewhere, or a fork in the road. But such a great write tho, i really enjoyed this. Nice job!! :)

[BillyGirl]

It's not often I see good poetry :) I liked this, it really spoke to me. Weel done.

[T. Logan]

I love the rhyme scheme in this, it all flows really well together. It has a great meaning, and i think it really speaks to whoever is reading it.

[Dean Kuch®]

Looking for the proverbial light at the end of the tunnel; We all do it. The lucky ones are those which have just enough stamina left to reach the end. The rest just get caught up in the quagmire somewhere in between. Masterfully writen and beautifully stated!

[Bailey C. Writing]

Nothing better than a relatable poem. I really liked this one, nice rhyme scheme and nice imagery, this was a good write, and I really like it myself. Good job

[Whiskurz]

You have excellent rhyme and flow and boundless creativity....you will go far as a poet.....Well penned my friend......Whisk

[msJ]

great work...