It's been a long time coming

It's been a long time coming

A Poem by Linear
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An old poem revamped

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When in the translation of emotions all feeling is lost When the wolf howls out of distress and flowers no longer bloom Where will you be? When days are long and the nights longer still and the moon no longer shines, so darkness envelopes you like a shroud Where will you be? And you hear the plaintive wail of a mothers cry for a lost or abandoned child and all the rivers have run into dried out seas Where will you be? Then at long times lasting, you turn your eyes to me to that vacant spot where you thought i would be then i wonder where will you be? When transgressions wear you down, and all hope has fled and mortality stares at you from that empty place Where do you think i will be?

© 2011 Linear


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Wonderful write - I ask these same questions over and over again!
"When in the translation of emotions all feeling is lost" A trend that seems to happening all too often. We misunderstand the intentions of the other, which leads to a breakdown in comprehension, communication and the subsequent drift between people, signalling the inevitable, slow but sure demise of a once perfectly great relationship. Tragic really...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very well said. Death will come for us all. I kow where I will be, Where will you be? I love it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


this made me do quite a lot of self reflection

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a really captivating write! Sounds sorta like Christ's return

Posted 8 Years Ago


Impressively done!
Don't forget to clean things up. Drafts are great (especially for a peer-edit site), but you have to be sure that there aren't too many obvious grammar mistakes before posting. A lot of people will stop reading because it bugs them so much. It doesn't matter so much to ME at the moment, but do try to do a little editing.


Posted 8 Years Ago


This was very well done, I loved the repetition, it leads the piece on and captures you from the beginning. This reminds me of a moment with one of my characters.

Something like a love hate relationship, taking someone for granted yet you know they are there for you, but your not really there for them...and then the moment comes when you realize what your actions cost you, think that person is there for you, and finding out they are not.

Great job,

Vinny~

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

NICE! I think your diction is on top because they are able to convey the sentiment in this unique piece. Plus most of us can relate to it.
And you hear the plaintive wail of a mother's cry for a lost or abandoned child...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very creative! Such a genius work! Good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


so thought-provoking...wow...very powerful writing...a impeccable flow with great thoughts...good work..

Posted 8 Years Ago


I will be here for them as you will-

Chloe

Posted 8 Years Ago



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