Always the Clown

Always the Clown

A Poem by Linear
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Just me trying to write

"
Though I write you will probably
never see what you meant to me
all you saw where
the tips of icebergs

Even if you looked would you see me
the love I held inside
just for you
but you only saw the plant and not the root

In those years
we were seldom apart
we loved free
yet you only saw the blossom not the tree

And now that time has passed by
I still think of you so much
though I saw you and all that you could be

You Amazed me
I saw the woman not the girl
the smile never the frown
a blind man in love

The fool
always the clown
I wish you had seen me
and all that I could have been

© 2011 Linear


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wonderful ~ emotional depth ~ of what one sees and another shows....the lines were profound and simple - "yet you only saw the blossom not the tree" - this is important...we neglect to recognize the root of love and only praise the superficial and short lived blossom - yet in the winter when its cold - love is still alive but left abandoned....this is what i felt through this write - thank you for sharing -


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is a an awesome piece of poetry. I love the way you set ideas in motion-simply yet artistic. What can I add to a piece with astounding and vivid descriptions with Symbolism at its best.

In those years
we were seldom apart
we loved free
yet you only saw the blossom
not the tree

Heartfelt writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh, this is just fantastic! I love your analogies. Just amazing and so well penned.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damn....I think you may be my younger and much better looking twin. You have the high maintenance emotion gene like I do. Feeling a little more...wanting a little more...loving a little more. Its why I can so identify with your writing.....from here on out, you tell me what I want to hear and I will tell you...deal? Great write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written, overflows with emotions...:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the ache is palpable~ your stanza's are built in perfect emotional alignment to at the end deliver the deeply felt strike of the reality of the situation~

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That last stanza dropped me into the depths of my stomach>> I felt those words with every fiber of my being>> One who never looks deep enough and they miss the point>>>miss the potential of the relationship>>
You placed a boulder in my belly with this one>> for that I thank you>> Such an emotional journey>>

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"we loved free" --i think it should be "freely"..well it's a minor thing anyways
"yet you only saw the blossom not the tree"-- i like this part as well as the ending. nice and dramatic! though there were some cliches. avoid it! something that makes people say "why didn't i think of that, darn it" is always a more interesting read. nice metaphors, though.
nice :)



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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you speak with such refined clarity on this. The analogy of not seeing that full person like a tree and it's root or the iceberg..what we see is not always the whole picture and you managed to convey the idea as I said with such clarity..really enjoying and poignant thought provoking read

Posted 8 Years Ago


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nice!

Posted 8 Years Ago


i think it will always be devastatingly painful when the words "could" and "would" are involved.... those are lingering words that really haunt. There is a lot of "I" and "you", which makes me sense that with this person, you have become very defensive. there's a lot of defending and attacking .

Posted 8 Years Ago


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