Sleepy Time Dreams

A Quick and short poem

In lightening silver streak
Tossed and lost
Inside a tempest deep

There forever my soul to keep
If I could only
Stay asleep

To see your face
And have some peace

Reviews

[Ruth]

To awake is the sad part of such wishful dreams...beautifully worded love, missed your work xx

[An owl on the moon]

There is that haunted longing expressed here in this dreamish stillness... Wanting to stay.. to escape that pain of life.. to be with your love in a world of no sorrow... You've spoken into us all.

[Ladysue]

beautiful and excellently written.

[Moflo]

This is very well written, I could see it being placed at the end of an anthology...its heartfelt and sincere. Nice write.

[Kiri Nells]

This is extremely beautiful and strong! I love it! You do so much with rhythm and emotion in only a few lines. Great write, my friend :)

[lifesmith]

The only problem with this poem is that it ended...the shortest ones are always the sweetest! fantastic poem, my dear

[Daytonight]

Very beautifully written. I liked the form you used. Keep up the great work!

[SINDE]

Awesome piece:)
There forever my
soul to keep
If I could only
stay asleep...
Keep your pen in motion my friend.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love the construction of composition~ art itself how you present emotions through lyrical words~