Well said. Great write and I can totally relate having been on the other side of the Narcissists mental games of hide and seek. Manipulation at the very best. I love the style, it grabs the reader and allows you to feel as you move through the poem. Nice job!
It's an autobiographical poem.... I apologize on behalf of all the horrible narcissists you've enco.. read moreIt's an autobiographical poem.... I apologize on behalf of all the horrible narcissists you've encountered. They are a good time from time to time though, in small doses. A little bit goes a long way.
8 Years Ago
1 was enough. I'm sure I have encountered more in the world but living with 1 was plenty. I am fre.. read more1 was enough. I'm sure I have encountered more in the world but living with 1 was plenty. I am free of the craziness! I will read more of your poetry, I do like your style :)
2 Years Ago
Oh dear - two science nerds - and me - too funny 😂
A narcissist is someone
who can gaze in the mirror intently
while someone beside them
bleeds slowly from the jugular
I once dated a narcissist. Basically they are like leeches. They'll anesthetize the wound so they can keep sucking their prey's blood as long as they can (read as long as they want) In this case, the bloodfest lasted five years till we both fell away drained, exhausted. In each other we found ourselves...Yes, that's love.
I am jealous of this writing (envious doesn't sound strong enough). I dislike a superior writer (or writing). I can't stand anything that pokes through my illusions of grandeur :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
A true narcissist is hard to see coming.
Nice to meet you.
Be carefu.. read moreA true narcissist is hard to see coming.
Nice to meet you.
Be careful around my wild animal parts, I hear they're cunning.
(you're only jealous because you don't write enough these days; try 5 times and I bet one will turn out better than this)
6 Years Ago
Yet, can a narcissist be an effective poet? I suspect this is the reason most of my own writing seem.. read moreYet, can a narcissist be an effective poet? I suspect this is the reason most of my own writing seems quite shallow and contrived to me. I write mostly to pander to my own ego. Its a fact. Well, at least I'm honest with myself.
5 Years Ago
Yes. A self aware narcissist is usually a great poet.
As long as you're self aware. .. read moreYes. A self aware narcissist is usually a great poet.
As long as you're self aware. The rest is easy, the world is simple.
5 Years Ago
Yes, they do have an edge over the others and the self-aware are never really bad people.
strong words that resinate with someone who also loves himself and strives for importance in the most unnecessary places. I enjoyed this piece a lot.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I think this applies to most people in varying degrees. Few admit it thou.. read moreI'm glad you enjoyed it. I think this applies to most people in varying degrees. Few admit it though, even to themselves.
This is a wickedly wild thing, rabidly turning in and on itself, searching to be what it already is, and entirely entertaining. The word play and imagery burns, and at times it takes a moment to connect the flashing messages and sensation.
However, it needs to be caged. There has to be some form of structure that the beauty of this work would be well displayed upon, some frame that would serve, like the nature scenes painted on the concrete enclosures in zoos, allow the patron to fool themselves that the creature there in enclosed is fooled by the false mirage.
Thank you for bringing this to my attention, a read worthy of the investment in time, so much fun.
I agree, it does need something. However I'm not about to start writing strict Shakespeare style iam.. read moreI agree, it does need something. However I'm not about to start writing strict Shakespeare style iambic pentameter with my ideas... I want to define my own cage. I suppose defining your own "prison" would be one of the greatest things an individual can do for themselves. I feel the same about "caging" my poems. It might sound like I don't agree with your review but I really do.
7 Years Ago
iambic pentameter, haiku, English sonnet, Italian sonnet, Sestina, Villanelle, or any other truly fi.. read moreiambic pentameter, haiku, English sonnet, Italian sonnet, Sestina, Villanelle, or any other truly fixed format, that is not a necessity, nor my suggestion.
A little punctuation, perhaps a slight grouping of the lines to present idea and mood changes, even a slight considerations to the communication presentation, if for no other reason than to take pity of the poor reader who wishes to understand that which you have created.
7 Years Ago
Ah... I get you. The punctuation thing, nah, I don't agree. I've always been a fan of hunter s Tho.. read moreAh... I get you. The punctuation thing, nah, I don't agree. I've always been a fan of hunter s Thompson's style. I think that less punctuation leaves more imagination available to be speculated on. The ideas are not affected, I don't think. You got the gist of it I'm sure. I do think it needs more form, just not of the punctuation variety.
I enjoyed reading this. I'm not an expert in poetry, so I can't really say anything critical about it.
It's another well-paced and interesting poem to read - we've all encountered these people before. I like the short lines, it makes it more powerful.