seconds

you stay until you've payed

the beast monster

you see until you can't

explain the sight's

you try until it empties

irrelevant is the order

the moment is the gift

the cost it is...

a thing

to bear

upon an empty glass

and broken windows

you stay until you've payed

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

You stay until you've payed. Despite the broken windows and empty glasses. These are words of a survivor. I like how the opening and final lines are the same, for added emphasis. Repetition that works. Your posted image shows a glint of light in a dark place. I am reminded that depression and other mental health issues are a constant battle. They are the darkness waiting for the seconds when the light breaks through.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

The poem is trash. How did you feel about the music at the end?

[Chris Shaw]

It's the middle of the night. The music will have to wait otherwise I will disturb the sleeping. The poem is far from trash. It spoke to me and gave me imagery.

[Davidgeo]

It's four and one half minutes of excellence. You'll like it. Tired or not.

[Chris Shaw]

OK will listen

[Betty Hermelee]

in life, we all pay a cost for what we do. This poem describes this situation very well. You push through life at any cost, until you've payed. I like the content and the way you used the same line in the beginning and at the end to emphasize your thought.
Nice write.
Best, Betty