You are my drug .

You are my drug .

A Poem by Olivia Ashley

You're a mess but the most amazing mess I've ever seen . 
I need you more than air and water . I feel like nothing without you . 
We are far from perfect but perfection is boring . 
You make me cry and scream and I make you punch walls and cuss but we will always come back to each other .
We are a big beautiful mess . 
" if you trip and fall well guess what hun life isn't going to stop while you pick yourself back up" is what you say to me
we fight , and yes I have a few bruises from the fight last night and you have a few scratch marks on your back from my nail  when we made up and made love . 
You are my drug and no matter how hard I try to get over you I will always come running back telling you that i love you . 

© 2012 Olivia Ashley


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I like and understand the sentiments written into this poem. I love the words: "most amazing mess I've ever seen"

"if you trip and fall well guess what hun life isn't going to stop while you pick yourself back up" is what you say to me"- that line could be clarified... some punctuation might help. like:
If you trip and fall, well, guess what hun? Life isn't going to stop while you pick yourself back up" is what you say to me... though I'd consider shortening it or something too.

I feel like this would have been a more effective poem it the lines were shorter... separated, spread out, so that the reader would have time to think about what the words mean.

In general you did a good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Olivia Ashley
Olivia Ashley

Bikini Bottom, VA



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