"Memories of a Chalk"

"Memories of a Chalk"

A Poem by L.C. Jarrette
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"Sonnet 1"

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Silhouettes fade as summer draws near
Yearning for their presence in this barren room
Rippling sounds of one's laughter cause me to tear
Awakens this reverie like scent perfume

The vastness I never thought existed
Past the hallways where we've spent our youth
Smiles of the little ones thus recollected
Pictures from the bulletins show love and truth

Just as my heart, the red apple sits quietly
Treasuring the bond of our love so pure
The hugs, fights, celebration and anxieties
Carves the path to grow and mature

Oh darlings, it pains me to say goodbye
So please keep this chalk to remember me by.

© 2017 L.C. Jarrette


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'Memeories of a Chalk'
L.C.Jarrette,
Memories living on within the heart radiates through this writing. "
Silhouettes fade as summer draws near." first line.
This sets the mood of remnants, traces of the real within the heart not easily erased.
Phrases you have used, very defining...
"barren room, rippling s sounds of one's laughter, reverie like scent perfume."
"hallways where we've spent our youth , pictures from the bulletins show love and truth"
'red apple sits quietly, please keep this chalk to remember me by."
Your poem is the soul's heart still holding the dear experience of children learning and
the joys of teaching them.
blessings,
Kathy

Posted 2 Years Ago


Childhood memories, revived from ages past
Now dwell in front of me
What has time done, and I done with time?

Very, very moving, very well put.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Great poem! it has a tinge of wistfulness which makes the reader want to cry!!
"Oh darlings, it pains me to say goodbye
So please keep this chalk to remember me by."


Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

wistfulness! yes! that's exactly the word.thank you very much!
DarkMist

3 Years Ago

You're welcome
This is really moving. You really know how to express yourself!

Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

thank you eliazar...
School "daze" and memories... as each began to become who they are.

Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

hello sir..i'm so happy you read my poem. thank you very much.
:)
This is an enjoyable sonnet. It doesn't follow the iambic pentameter of the traditional form, but nevertheless, I see this as a more loose, modern adaptation.
What I love most about this piece is how true-to-heart it seems. You pay a lot of attention to the little details like the "red apple," the "pictures from the bulletins," and (most notably) the chalk that the speaker wishes to be remembered by. You also keep your message clear and concise despite the requirements of the form. For that, bravo!

Your rhymes, grammar, and syntax are mostly spot-on, but I didn't like the rhyme of "formed" with "mature" in the third stanza; since I pronouce mature as "maCHER" and not "maCHORE," those words didn't sound remotely similar. Also, the second line is grammatically incorrect: "Rippling *sounds* of *one's* laughter."

- William Liston


Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

wow, thanks a lot! i love honest comments..
and thank you for your corrections. i'll edit it .. read more
Amazing use of words and thoughts.
"The vastness I never thought existed
Past the hallways where we've spent our youth
Smiles of the little ones thus recollected
Pictures from the bulletins show love and truth"
The above lines. Perfect and realistic. I enjoyed the complete poem and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote


Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

thank you sir, very much...
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

You are welcome. A outstanding poem.
(wipes away tear) This poem is beautiful, my friend. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

thank you my friend...
okay, this will be my
Sonnet 1

Posted 3 Years Ago



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