Ideal Realized

Ideal Realized

A Poem by Jack
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I am not done with this yet....

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So many people in this world, look at all the different races

Billions of tiny little people, live lives located in different spaces.

We may vary in shape and size, please surmise we must realize, Even though

We may feel small, United as one human race we could stand so tall

 

In our hearts we can agree, on the fundamentals, of our humble humanity.

We want to live, to be happy, want acceptance,  safety and freedom

Even though the piece of land we call our homes falls in different places

No matter where you go in the world a smile’s the same on all of our faces

 

When will we accept to truly prosper we must all be on the same roster,

We are all uniquely human which makes us  all the same

let’s join one team then we can finally win the game

Stop acting like we have to imagine to see a true Utopian society

© 2010 Jack


Author's Note

Jack
I am not done with this yet I just wanted to post the 'rough draft'



Featured Review

Jack, I love the way you write for things, issues that matter..
"In our hearts, I know we can agree", yes we all do.. we all want to live free, in our own ways.. Here in India, where I live, I can relate to these things so easily.. i too wish, we lived in a world where people are not judged by the petty racism, and all other sort of stuff which divide people into higher and lower sects.. after all we all are humans, and as you say, "a smile’s the same on all of our faces"..
good job man.. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Jack, I love the way you write for things, issues that matter..
"In our hearts, I know we can agree", yes we all do.. we all want to live free, in our own ways.. Here in India, where I live, I can relate to these things so easily.. i too wish, we lived in a world where people are not judged by the petty racism, and all other sort of stuff which divide people into higher and lower sects.. after all we all are humans, and as you say, "a smile’s the same on all of our faces"..
good job man.. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is excellent!
When we all learn to advance with positivity and peace?
A wonderful poem!
xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


Haha, Sasha the tone you picked up on was definitely intentional :) since a world in which there was peace and harmony between all people is the ultimate goal of humans.....at least I strongly think it should be!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is lovely. It's come a long way since I first saw it. The sentiment, of course, is one I can appreciate. It had an almost "Why can't you people just see how right this is?" tone which is good because it damn well should've. :P The first stanza is my favorite. It sums everything up wonderfully and has a nice rhyme to it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Brilliant and smart. It is spirit in the word form. I really liked reading it not only because it is upbeat but it keeps the light on and rekindles the flame of all of our hopes. cheer and thanks for sharing this.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I live in the U.S.A. I began writing my Sophomore year of high school. I love writing, drawing, and playing music with anyone who can hold a beat. I am motivated by the feeling, although elusive, when.. more..

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