Unrequited

Unrequited

A Poem by Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
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My second attempt at the difficult art of sonnet. I have to confess despite its rule scheme requirements there is a unique beauty to them.

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Unrequited 

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 



Oh, Death, you are like a heart of barbed wire.

I'm fascinated, smitten by desire.


The haunted ghosts of my troublesome soul

Whisper of your hallowed indifferent glow


Oh, Life, joyous in yearning hopes aspired

Defined in seconds, minutes, days acquired


I reminisce in smiles and teardrops

Pink cotton candy and red lollipops 


Dualistic lovers we come to see

Professed devotion in their company 


One standing in shades of darkest silence 

One singing joyful in blissed reverence 


Destined to experience both in time

One is forever; the other sublime 

© 2021 Carlos Lorenzo Estrada


Author's Note

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
My second attempt at sonnet though it may still fall short of the iambic scheme it was fun to write. I enjoy the challenge because it allows for growth on this writing journey. So I say to those hesitant to try I implore you to give it a go. Even in failure beautiful art can thrive from it. Thank you all and feel free to leave your thoughts my friends.

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This was beautiful a read. I have had many unrequited loves in my past, and the line, "I reminisce in smiles and teardrops," was something I have done many times in my life. I wish I could eventually find someone to share my life with, but unfortunately, my tragic love life has only been occupied with unrequited ones. Wonderful poem. I quite enjoyed reading your art.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Social media is such a scourge on our society it just can bring out the worst qualities in people. .. read more
A.E. Surdam

1 Month Ago

My mother told me inspiring words when she was alive: He's just a man. I never truly understood her .. read more
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome and your mom sounds like she was an amazing woman. The apple doesn't fall to fa.. read more
great word that, "unrequited" - says a boatload. we've probably felt as such at one time or another. made me feel suspiciously unappreciated. such feeling does not pass quickly or easily. well done ... :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Pete, for leaving your thoughts on this poem. I feel one of the arts of writing which som.. read more
Without doubt you have a way with words that enhance the imagination of the reader. I've enjoyed every word! Thank you Carlos!

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Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Augustus, for leaving your thoughts on this poem. This type of poetry is very different f.. read more
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Great second attempt Carlos! Starts out very smooth and easy breezy. Duality throughout! Now you've got me counting syllables again. Ha! The ending came abruptly, even though I knew. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing your words!

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Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Thank you Seriana for leaving your thoughts on this poem. I have always had a fascination with duali.. read more
Very nicely penned sonnet Carlos. Second couplet conveys so well that feeling of unrequited love. Indifferent just sums it up perfectly. I feel sure most of us have experienced that sort of emotion at some point during our lives. Not easily forgotten is it?

Chris

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Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Thank you Chris for leaving your thoughts on the poem I truly appreciate it so much.
4th line I think you meant "whisper"---
But a well-done sonnet, with a nice gentle rhyme scheme and some slant rhyme mixed in.
I am not a form guy, but this doesn't hit the reader over the head with it...it sneaks up on us.
nicely done.
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Jacob, for your thoughts and also keen helpful eye. You're right it should be whisper. I .. read more

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Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

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