A simple poem...

A simple poem...

A Poem by Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
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of course I'm being facetious. I know poetry is not as easy as it looks. (Saying this as Muse has gun to my head).

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A simple poem...

(About Love)

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 


Write me a poem 
that sings with each verse

That dances like music 
emotes with each word

Write me a poem 
that paints with each line

In superfluous colors
which sparkle in ryhme 

Write me a poem 
with scent so divine

In lilac and roses
magnetic sublime 

Write me a poem 
of sorrow and woe

Melancholic in nature 
despondent in flow

Write me a poem
that describes every touch 

Which tingles the senses 
and fulfills every lust 

Write me a poem 
with all of these things 

Recited from knowledge 
transcendent as Spring 


And when you have written 
such things as above 

You'll finally comprehend
this feeling called love

© 2022 Carlos Lorenzo Estrada


Author's Note

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
My muse asked of me "What do you know about love?" I was taking aback by her question and somewhat defensive. I explained my trials and tribulations that defined my love life throughout my 57 years of life. She replied after my long winded explanation, "So you know nothing!" Again, I took offense to her comment going into further details about my experience of love. "Still doesn't change the fact you know nothing about love!" She said in calm tone while blowing on her freshly painted fingernails. " I know a lot about love!" was my retort. "No you don't because you've never been married, old man, and know nothing about loving anything greater than yourself." Touche. She had a point. Feel free to comment, troll, or laugh at my expense. CLE

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There are some really nice word choices here. They happen to rhyme but the words are interesting even without attending to the rhyme or meter. And it nicely captures the many aspects of emotion, from elation to sorrow to melancholy. Very nice!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you I appreciate your insightful comment on this poem. When writing this piece I wasn't sure .. read more
Hi Carolos, such an enjoyable poem. I didn't know where it was headed until I read the last few lines. Your build up enveloped the feeling of love. Thank you! Temp

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Temp, for your thoughts on this poem. I had a similar experience writing this in that I .. read more
Temperance

1 Year Ago

Always a pleasure.
Very nice, with a great and unexpected ending.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you Toni for sharing your thoughts on this poem. The subject of love is always difficult to w.. read more
Carlos, the first thing that captures me about this work is its musicality which carries reader to the end. The next thing I went back for was for all the amazing techniques of slant and assonance and consonance and a bit of alliteration which wiped away any sense of forced rhyme into a glorious whole of a wonderful descriptive message. Totally enjoyed this one, Carlos
Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you kindly, Winston, for your comment on this poem. I apologize for the late reply I have n.. read more
W. Barrett Munn

1 Year Ago

Thanks. This site for me is a sounding board where I post what is rarely a finished work. It gives m.. read more
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

You are a remarkable writer Winston. I feel in many ways we are all poets and storytellers. The on.. read more
This is pretty amazing.
Perfect for spoken word.
Im going to give you the highest score.
100

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you, thank you, thank you. You're too kind and I so appreciate your sweet comment on this p.. read more
light and ashes

1 Year Ago

You are so very welcome, and I am so glad. :)
You should really give it a try.
Not much on love poems but this one has style. Nice write ✍️
JP

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you JP for your comment on this poem. In all honesty I'm not much of a poet when it comes to .. read more
A wonderful dance of words for love Carlos. I liked the flow of thoughts and the amazing ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry for love.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you CP for your thoughts on this piece. It is always appreciated my friend. Despite the simp.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

Love for men and women is different now. We forget. There are good and bad days. We must overcome bo.. read more
This is soooooooo lovely .
In simple to understand terms you have unravelled the mystery of what love actually is :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you Stella for your comment on this poem I appreciate it. This poem was really a struggle to .. read more
Your couplets use clear language, nothing complex to describe love which is complex at times. I very much enjoyed the flow and impression left by after reading. Great poem Carlos. All your work is consistently high in its standards. Have a good Thursday.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you Chris for the kind comment on this poem. As I mentioned to Jacob I really struggled with .. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome Carlos. Sometimes we can over think our poetry. I do believe many of us struggl.. read more
I like everything you said here, Carlos, starting with your "About" page. Poetry has a special place in literature - in my view it establishes the pecking order by arranging everything below it.
In this poem, you have done it great justice.
Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me on this piece, Winston. I truly appreciate it. Writing .. read more

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Added on August 29, 2022
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Carlos Lorenzo Estrada
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

salinas , CA



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If I can say something worth saying that makes just one person think about others...I'll try. The greatest storyteller was my grandmother. I miss her stories. Also, I would like to add to please pay.. more..

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