Excuse me Mr President

Excuse me Mr President

A Poem by Valkyrie Warrior
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Just some flaws

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Excuse my Mr President, I don't mean to pry

 

But how can you just sit, while normal people die

 

Did you daddy hurt you?

 

Were you forced and lost your virtue?

 

Or do you just not care?

 

Are you deaf to hear?

 

The cries of Mothers dying

 

An the voice of Fathers lying

 

The sound of children crying

 

Is this your lullaby?

 

So excuse me Mr President

 

I do not mean to pry

 

But look at all this mess

 

Does it make you cry?

 

 

 

 

 

4th place

Feb 4, 2015


 

 

 

 

 

 

3

Jan 6, 2015


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2015 Valkyrie Warrior


Author's Note

Valkyrie Warrior
for a contest :)

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I liked this! Don't stop writing more poems like this one. Even if we can't change things it's good to let our thoughts out.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, you made my day :)
Well, this one would get first place in my contest for sure. But i believe, i also have the answer to the questions... Lets look at the system... President's hands are tied...if parliament wont agree on a suggestion, the president can't do anythin. In our system, (Hungary) two third of all in the parliament must vote the 'yes' in order for a suggestion of a new law to be brought into the system, same applies for changing existing laws/rights. Well...that is it in a nutshell. Nice poem. 100 points.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

5 Years Ago

Nicely said! Thank you!
Dani The Unreviewed

5 Years Ago

You are welcome :) always.
Wow, great writing, and your call to help for humanity in wonderful as well. It is so hard to believe your age, you are going to be a force to be reckoned with. Keep writing. The world needs to hear your words. Great job. Thank you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

:)!!!!!!!!!!!
Confuser

6 Years Ago

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Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

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Very Powerful piece, I am a true believer sadly that most destruction to our planet and human lives are due to CIA, FBI, Military experiments and government cover ups. The worst part is they are not researching cures, or World Peace, or humanitarian efforts, as much as the secret scientific experiments for the next super weapons, or place to save THEIR asses if a world disaster occurs. Places we won't be welcome, or profits we will never befit from. Some things just need to be left alone, everyone of brilliance wants to be the next Einstein, which is wonderful. Unless it involves things that will further destroy our lives and planet, opposed to preserving what we already have.
Wonderful and Powerful piece with a wonderful question.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing
Dani The Unreviewed

5 Years Ago

Yup...if every government would spend as much effort on tryin to fix the problems they created, inst.. read more
Bet you won this is awesomely written and perhaps could even be true maybe some day I will write a story

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
W R Stowe

6 Years Ago

your welcome
Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

:).....................
Very Nice flow! It's cool though!
What was it for?

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you! It was for a contest.
C. Lee Battaglia

6 Years Ago

Awesome! :)
Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

:)!!!!!!!!!!!!
This had a nice flow to it. I like how it sounds more prosaic than poetic.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much. Umm I am not quite sure what "prosaic" means? can you explain?
SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

6 Years Ago

More prose-like, not a figurative language overload in the sense of how I used it
Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Oh cool, thanks.
This had a nice flow to it. I like how it sounds more prosaic than poetic.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This put together real nicely. Your use of perfect and imperfect rhyming makes it even more appealing! I'm sure this will do spectacularly in a contest! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind review :)
omfg I love this !!!!! i actually hummed to it cx

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much!!!

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