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Free

A Poem by Disturbed mind

I look at the dying body under the bed ...
Laying on his back...straight
With his hands under his stomach ...
His face seemed known to me
A sad and tired face
His breathing was almost nonexistent
His look was distant and desolate.
He was surrounded by people who was crying
crying secretly without looking at him
I asked them why they were crying ...
Nobody answered
A strange feeling enveloped me
I knew the dying guy
But of where? ... Why I don’t remember?
Suddenly he looks at me
A huge thrill plaguing my chest
His eyes filled with tears ...
But the in the corner of his mouth I see a smile
he stretch his arm in my direction
I walk up to him, trembling as never
He gets my hands ... and I don’t feel his
he looks deep inside of my eyes and says ...
"You are free! ... I'm free ..."
Then I remembered ...
That dying body ... that distant look
That sad face ... that smile semisweet ...
That is…this body is…
His hands fainted ...
Screams of pain echoed through out the room
I was dead ... I’m free!

© 2009 Disturbed mind


Author's Note

Disturbed mind
Once again sorry for any mistake...my english isn't that good...

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How many of us have had dreams like this? Dreams where we see ourselves - either about to die or dead and gone? And it is true that somehow, we realize we are free, truly free, from all the obligations and nagging problems that haunt us in life. The underlying message is here is this: We are as free as we want to be. I read a story recently of a millionaire who chose to be homeless. He wanted nothing from this life but to help others. When he died he left his fortune to charities that help the homeless. Now that is freedom. Thanks for a wonderful look into freedom. Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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AnA
good job actually, can't say that I'm fully agreed with being free after death or whatever, but very weel done, touching and mysterious!

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a deep and riveting piece. I enjoyed the visuals. Great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW! I have had many dreams of such.. Where I would see myself lying there, yet I was already dead.. This gave a feeling of finding yourself, escaping into the one in the write.. I like what you did with this.. Gave me a feeling of freedom, becoming one with the man and letting go.. Great imagery here.. Keep up the good work. Oh and all is good. My english isn't that good either sometimes. LOL


Mag xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How many of us have had dreams like this? Dreams where we see ourselves - either about to die or dead and gone? And it is true that somehow, we realize we are free, truly free, from all the obligations and nagging problems that haunt us in life. The underlying message is here is this: We are as free as we want to be. I read a story recently of a millionaire who chose to be homeless. He wanted nothing from this life but to help others. When he died he left his fortune to charities that help the homeless. Now that is freedom. Thanks for a wonderful look into freedom. Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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