girls in the bar...

girls in the bar...

A Poem by Brad
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For Kerry's THursday Challenge #1: inspiration from "Catcher in the Rye" by J.D. Salinger.

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“That's the thing about girls. Every time they do something pretty, even if they're not much to look at, or even if they're sort of stupid, you fall half in love with them, and then you never know where the hell you are. Girls. Jesus Christ. They can drive you crazy. They really can.”
The Catcher in the Rye

 

Of course she was a crummy girl

Do you have a light?

Of course I was a gentleman and lit her cigarette

Buy a girl a drink?

I never liked blatant beggars, for the life of me

So what do you do for a living?

Already, she is sizing me up according to the thickness of my wallet

I just love a man with a thick head of hair…

Shallow intent gets a woman nowhere in my book

Oopsie, guess I’ve had a bit too much to drink! (giggles)

DANGER! DANGER, WILL ROBINSON! DANGER!

Maybe we could go back to your place so I can freshen up?

Maybe we could buy you a t-shirt that says ‘town bike’?

I must apologize, for I’m not like this normally, I seem to have let the night get to me.

Or perhaps you’re a phony, like every other woman with a gin streak in her and a lonely heart?

I’ve always depended on the kindness of strangers…

Do you think you’re Blanche DuBois from “streetcar”? she was a nutjob too.

My what a fabulous apartment you have!

Care for a drink, baby?

© 2011 Brad


Author's Note

Brad
Kerry's Thursday Challenge #1. i'm a chump for a demanding south african girl!

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This is just so flol....and so true...boy, I smiled and laughed my way through this escapade...and was so happy to see such a happy ending...for the evening that is...
You have such a unique, candid, flippant way of telling a story...refreshing, carefree and matter-of-factly....Oh, BTW, great write, Bradley
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Posted 9 Years Ago


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Girls we must all be nuts,fish in the sea, anything save a Buddie tell him to run !

Posted 8 Years Ago


Back and forth, back and forth, like a sine wave that fails to be a function when it is bisected by the y-axis.

Nice work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So why did you buy her the drink?
Love the subtext, i can imagine it on stage. Great piece of writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's so typical to see a girl acting this way in a bar. You've sized up the situation perfectly and I love the ending. Good Job. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Looks like you, let the night carry you away as well, Even with your streak of man in you, against the female, that was not so much looking like heaven & begging for the attention to fill the lonely heart~ She made it back to your place after all~ :-)) lol

mmm, I wonders what you were thinking with after all?

Cute write~....

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Haaaa!!!! damn you, always taking home the floozy. With dudes its..."why can't things happen like they do in the Penthouse Forum" and then when they do......it sucks.. Too funny man, loevd it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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great quote. great piece. made me smile with my eyes andgrit my teeth. lol! well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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ha!! I knew you'd go for that quote haha - brilliantly captured in your own voice! nice!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Hmmm, let me see...who is the easy one here?
Great dialogue, and oh so frickin' true.
This made me cringe, er, smile.
Excellent writing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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