reminiscence.

       carry on with your dress

feel the plum petals

don't let your feet touch

the dry autumn leaves

keep running on coals

please stop humming tears

wait 'till you hear the sirens

and don't look back at me

i could still hear your voice

i loved it so much

i could still see your face,

all blurry but alluring to my deep eyes

i couldn't help but smile

we were at rest hearing you breathe 

i could still feel your hand

they were cold but they warmed me

the echoes were captivating loud

flashing backs and sorrow scars

they were all whispering goodbye

they told me to grip reminiscence

our tragedy was quite beautiful

i'll always look back and see you

now carry on with your dress,

maneuver your way delicately, beautiful

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Good vision brought to life with the amazing description.
"our tragedy was quite beautiful
i'll always look back and see you
now carry on with your dress,
maneuver your way delicately, beautiful"
The above lines were my favorite. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[charlotte]

this is quite deep and powerful

[charlotte]

i agree with many other writers on here, about the last few lines being very beautiful . This is a very beautiful and full of feeling ! well expressed ..

[lostnstars]

i appreciate your review, thank you so much!

[Mustafa]

a very good structured poem

[lostnstars]

thank you so much! x

[Hurry]

This really is so awesome... every time i read it, it gives me goosebumps T.T I love it! Keep writing senpai!

-Puffin

[lostnstars]

Yeah das right. Haha I didn't know you read the same writings twice :p Anyways thankyouuu, and will do :)

-blue jay x

[Peaches]

Why are your lines so beautiful 😭

[lostnstars]

Aw thank you so much 💜

[Peaches]

You're welcome

[Pharos]

beautifully written and you can really feel the emotions of the character in this!

[MJ]

I absolutely love the imagery in this! I can definitely picture what the character is seeing. Good job :)

[AaronFreitas]

"our tragedy was quite beautiful
i'll always look back and see you
now carry on with your dress,
maneuver your way delicately, beautiful"
Awesome write! I really enjoyed it but that last stanza was awesome!