hope.

hope.

A Poem by lostnstars

Let’s talk about the sun

How the light sky runs

Every day when I wake

Stare by the lake

And I say,

“Hope you’re doing okay.”

 

Let’s talk about the moon

How it beautifully blooms

Before the night skies glow

Stare out the window

And I say,

“Hope you’re doing okay.”

 

Let’s talk about the stars

How they shine from a far

They twinkle at me

Wishing you could also see

And I say,

“Hope you’re doing okay”

 

Let’s talk about us

How we fell apart and got lost

Every day I think of you

Hiding that I’m feeling blue

And I think about it every day

I hope you’re doing okay.

© 2016 lostnstars


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This is really beautiful. You can really feel the emotions flowing.
If I may criticize one thing, two of the rhymes seem a tiny bit off. Glow and window do rhyme, but the accents make reading it a bit awkward, and us + lost can sometimes make people read it as 'lust' for it to rhyme. IF you find someway to bypass that ( I honestly couldn't think of a way. Man, rhyming is hard!), this poem will really be perfect.
Keep up the good work!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

thank you for the feedback! i will surely revise it soon. :)



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I think we have a real poet here! that's a full mark,bravo lostnstars

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

Thankyou so much! i'm on my way to your writings and prove that you're really the real poet here hah.. read more
Mustafa

2 Years Ago

:)) well, thank you , I will probably upload a poem soon, I"m now with stories:))
man this is really boooom, i hope i was this gud man. im your fan already

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it and it means a lot to me and i'm on my way to read some of.. read more
Very good flow of thoughts led to the
good question.
"Let’s talk about us
How we fell apart and got lost"
The above lines. I asked often in my life. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 2 Years Ago


It's so beautifully penned....
The rhyming scheme adds great flow to it!!
I like the way the moon, stars are portrayed...
It was a great read

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much! x
This is really beautiful. You can really feel the emotions flowing.
If I may criticize one thing, two of the rhymes seem a tiny bit off. Glow and window do rhyme, but the accents make reading it a bit awkward, and us + lost can sometimes make people read it as 'lust' for it to rhyme. IF you find someway to bypass that ( I honestly couldn't think of a way. Man, rhyming is hard!), this poem will really be perfect.
Keep up the good work!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

thank you for the feedback! i will surely revise it soon. :)
To who ever this poem is pertaining to, I'm jealous! AHHAHAHA! Another great brew.

your number one fan,
Batman

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lostnstars

2 Years Ago

I dedicate this poem for you my beloved biggest fan.

the most amazing writer ever exi.. read more
Hurry

2 Years Ago

Shut up AHHAHAHA

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