Leads To The Future

Beggining of the chapter starts and ends with forsadowing.

Behind the Crimson Door

~Chapter 1~

Leads To The Future

Run faster That was all I could think as I ran from my unknown enemy. Faster, faster, faster! My feet where starting to hurt, and my breath came in loud sharp gasps. I have feel a stabing pain in my abdomen as I start to feel like I'm losing consciousness. Up ahead I see a red glow. i might just have a chane if I can get to that light. Using only my will to live as a energy source, I push onward. The light gets closer then closer the light slowly becomes more and more desirable."Are you sure you want to go that way?" A childs voice laughs. I turn my body to the right to see him. He is about 7. He is wearing red shorts and a black T-shirt with a small orange stain on the right sholder. He has short blonde hair and bright blue eyes."Why?" is all I manage to squeek.

"Because that door leads to the future."

"I don't care I just want to go home!"

"Is that what you really want?"

"Yes, I need to get away he's comming!"

"Well then I will send you on your way."

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"LillyAnna it's time to wake up! Mark is going to be hear in fourtey-five minuets! you don't want to be late on your first day of sophtmore year do you?!" Throwing off the blankets I comprehend what must have been the weirdest dream ever. A kid? Seriously?

I run to the bathroom and take the fastest shower known to man kind. Brush my hair, which is a job because it is so long it passes my thighs. Pulling my blonde mess of what I call hair into a pony tail, I search for my my outfit of the day. Deciding on light blue jean capris , and a dark blue tight t-shirt to show off my average figure . After applying a small amount of make-up complete with blue eyeshadow the bring out my deep blue eyes. I run down stairs through the kitchen and out to my boyfriend, Mark's car. Mark grabs me the second I jump in shotgun and plants a good one on me. Just a normal morning. On days like this seems like nothing can go wrong.

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy it I did NO brainstorming! Just kinda started writing

Reviews

[Craig2591]

Starts off with lots of action. I didn't realize it was a dream, which is probably what you intended. And the dream was very cryptic. I like that.

May I make a couple of suggestions?... I would say 'unremarkable figure' instead of 'average figure'. Also, perhaps she should ponder the dream some more as she's getting ready. What could it mean? Was it a new dream or a recurring one? How did it make her feel?

Just my opinion. Otherwise, it's a good start.

I found your book in the book reviews group. Feel free to review any chapter of my book. I tried to write each chapter as an individual short story so you can start just about anywhere.