Eyes that surrender the mind.

A child looked at the stars, neglecting his paces.

Eventually he tripped and fell on his own two laces,

cracking his head in three different places.

Enticed by the light, the child stared at the moon,

unable to see the tree ahead he would hit very soon.

Reprimanded time and time again he stared at his feet

as he walked under the sky following the dull and grey concrete.

His eyes lingered towards the setting sunshine,

but a tap on the cheek returned him to his downward rite.

Onward he went, never again tripping or falling,

believing its was a safe walk, concentrated and reassuring.

No one would believe his eyes had gone so blind and dull,

that no spark was left inside his impoverished skull.

He fell once more, for he no longer saw the way.

He walked off a cliff, never again to see the light of day.

For a moment  he flew, before falling into the eternal abyss.

Upward he landed and upward he found that long denied bliss.

Reviews

[Prince Bonsu]

...Eternal abyss
...long denied Bliss
Great usage👍it's a good piece

[Donald Meikle]

Lesson one/ Stop,look,and listen.
Lesson two/ Never stop looking.
Lesson three/ Heed this poem.

[MomzillaNC]

Oooo! A chilling reminder that we need to free our minds…

[Mad Poet]

This poem is good.
The writer is skillful, yet like a preacher, the writer seems like a concerned poet more interested in the message than in flaming poetic kisses.

[Mad Poet]

Please, reviuw "vino"...I would like to do more with this online group. :)

[Sami Khalil]

The title is unique. The write is so good. Bravo.....................

[Ettol]

This is brilliant. Keep writing.

[Vito]

The flow and content blew me away! This is powerful