Suicide (Realization)

Suicide (Realization)

A Poem by Sophie
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wrote this in algebra, as most of my poems seem to come from

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lips kiss
and fingers touch
but the contact hurts me

lace clothes
light as the air
feel heavy on my skin

your tears
as they fall
make a noise that shatters
my eardrums

my eyelashes
when they flutter on my cheeks
scrape the skin
and I bleed

my pupils shrink
and the light blinds me
it hurts
and I know
of my failed suicide

© 2013 Sophie


Author's Note

Sophie
I don't know where this came from all i knew was I didn't want to rhyme

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Well when poems are this intense, rhymes tend to take away from the seriousness. I do write almost all my poems in rhyme, but only because its hard for me to find a flow with words without them. You, however, are wonderful both ways. Before I joined this website, I thought my writing was amazing, and that I was already ready to become an author. This is the type of stuff that stop that thought, and showed me that I have so much more to learn. I am fourteen. I started writing when I was four. This was brillant as are most of your pieces.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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beautiful

Posted 6 Years Ago


Well when poems are this intense, rhymes tend to take away from the seriousness. I do write almost all my poems in rhyme, but only because its hard for me to find a flow with words without them. You, however, are wonderful both ways. Before I joined this website, I thought my writing was amazing, and that I was already ready to become an author. This is the type of stuff that stop that thought, and showed me that I have so much more to learn. I am fourteen. I started writing when I was four. This was brillant as are most of your pieces.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is fantastic and bit darker than your usual stuff, love it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

reminds me of my failed suicide... don't worry I'm trying that again anytime soon though XP this was excellent darling, quite detail oriented to provide a whole picture like a connect-the-dots image. well done :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well this is awesome. Made me think!
There are poems that rhyme and some that don't.
good job tho.
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was really really good!!! There are pieces that have no rhyme that are really good. I suppose that Algebra class has something in it that gives you really good inspiration like I have in Dallas, TX. Every time I go up there, I get these really good inspirations for pieces. Thanks for the RR, I really enjoyed this one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Well this is awesome. Made me think!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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