Abandoned

Abandoned

A Poem by Mary

Abandoned

 

All alone

With no one to hear or care

Everything had been thrown to the air

I sit and watch

And wait

Hoping they will show.

 

I check my email

And all my messages

No one has responded

I am truly alone

Now and forever abandoned

That is all I know.

 

Everyone has forgotten

The girl they used to know

And all I have to show

Is the memories

Of times once sweet

Now bitter with loss.

 

What was the cost?

Just my heart

Now darkened with

The hate

Of them

My once cherished friends.

 

I do wonder

If they know

That they left me abandoned

Lost in the perpetual snow

Of my life

Now empty without my friends.

© 2010 Mary


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Really good. The piece flows and really shows emotion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I've read a couple of your pieces. I'd say that the future looks promising. You have a good enough ear, maybe just put a bit more space in between rhyme sounds, though given the closeness you've done really well. I like how this is, and also that it could have been a rant. In a way it s a rant, but there are the hallmarks of crafting. crafting is good.

Posted 14 Years Ago


A very painful and sad poem but very well written. The pain of being abandoned by friends is strong in your words here. Wonderful job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked it. Sorry for not messaging you T-T......lol jk. Your ok. ^_^ It was great. You did awesome

Posted 14 Years Ago


im sorry i forgot to rate 100

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice! i totally agree

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

alittle overkill dont you think?

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 3 people found this review constructive.

It was really well written. I enjoyed reading it alot. I know how it feels to be the girl who has no friends and how it made me feel. I can relate to your poem alot.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is a really good poem. You capture that feeling of loneliness and pull the reader in! Great poem!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Oh, this is wonderful! I love the honesty and sadness of this poem. I'm sure many can relate!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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