Shattering Moment

Shattering Moment

A Poem by Mary

All my thoughts focused,

My mind at ease,

I just what I wanted to be,



I was not thinking of you,

I was not dreaming of you,

I was not crying because of you,

I was free of your power.


But then it happened.

I saw you.


You where leaving,

And I had just arrived.

What a silly twist of fate,

A pleasant surprise.


Our eyes met.

My breath caught.

And a smile formed on my lips.

I was yours again.


You didn’t even say hi,

But you greeted me in your own way.

And I couldn’t help but laugh.


You filled my thoughts,

And stole my soul.

Only around you I felt whole.

But I knew it wouldn’t last.


You would soon become past,

Or so I hoped.

Because you,

No matter how much I wanted,

Where not mine.


So I lied to myself,

Every second after.

But all I could remember,

Was my spontaneous laughter,

And your blue eyes.

© 2010 Mary

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This is a great write as well.

Posted 12 Years Ago

cool nice peace of art

Posted 12 Years Ago

I really like this, poetry is so easy its complicated. create your own world. go ahead, its addicting

Posted 12 Years Ago

but then enjoyable..
good work..

Posted 12 Years Ago

I enjoyed reading it, it gave an image of a small story. Great work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

My opinion of this piece is simple, it's good. You captured an emotion in this piece,

Posted 12 Years Ago

i really like this. good job.


Posted 12 Years Ago

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This is a really beautiful poem, and i particularly like the line 'You would soon become past'. You've really captured a moment in this piece. Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago

It is pretty! I think that you captured the character's emotions very well. good job! :) glad you are starting to write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Very nice poem but im confused why add blue eyes?

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on June 11, 2010
Last Updated on June 11, 2010



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