Realizations of a Lonely Nature

Realizations of a Lonely Nature

A Poem by xlynne
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what it feels like to be lonely. million different ways to describe loneliness but i guess I'D say in one word to feel lonely is to feel depressed or unwanted.

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Sitting here
In the low light of my lamp
Reading books
Feverishly flipping through pages
I pause
My eyes staring at that word
Friend �
I test it on my tongue
I look around my room
No pictures of smiling girls on big adventures
A heavy hand
Pushed down on my heart
It wore a ring
With the words �best� engraved
A half to a set
It laughed at me and it pitied me
So incompetent
Self-absorbed was I
That I had no one to brave the world with
No one to talk to
No one to go to the movies with,
No one to dance with
Why am I not likeable?
So hated and unwanted?
Am I that bad?

© 2008 xlynne


Author's Note

xlynne
MAJOR THANKS TO Phill Oz O'fee FOR ALL HIS HELP WITH THE FORMAT & AND ALL HIS SUGGESTIONS W/ THIS POEM, I REALLY APPRECIATE IT!
CRITICISM AND ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS AND ALL THAT APPRECIATED AND WELCOMED. I'M ENTERING THIS INTO THE Lonely contest so hopefully I'll win. crossing my fingers.
ps. you won't know what the picture is of unless you click it, don't know why it cuts half of it off. ?

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I especially like the lines " I pause, my eyes staring at that word -- Friend -- I test it on my tongue". Very powerful lines.Although I like the poem it disappointed me, the rest of the lines were honest and ordinary.
Again I do like the poem. Keep writing. You stated you wanted criticism and advice. Tony

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Posted 12 Years Ago


This shows your emotions very well and how the ring is just a fake in term of your friendship. I like how you begin the poem when you stare at the word, and then ponder it's meaning. Good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


WOW
This one was captivating
I can really see myself in this poem ....a lump gathers in my throat. I wish more people would call me to go out but this is not the place to pout! I just wanted to write and say that I will be sharing this one! I like it! Cheers and good luck to you, lea

Posted 14 Years Ago


The painful realization of loneliness and isolation is the true plague of our time. You have sharply written a piece that conveys this empty longing so well! I know this is not you, yet you leap so fully into the voice of your work. Amazing!

Craig

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow. good job. I understand completely. I feel lonely sometimes too. I am outgoing and have social life in church or work, but not really that close friend who I can hang out with. I have been spending a lot of time alone, so this poem touches my heart too.

i think phil was smart to give you this challenge. It turned out well.

Kena

Posted 14 Years Ago


Now that's what I call constructive, creative and sensitive writing. I am glad my suggestions were appreciated.

Excellent piece!

Phill(ozofee)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I especially like the lines " I pause, my eyes staring at that word -- Friend -- I test it on my tongue". Very powerful lines.Although I like the poem it disappointed me, the rest of the lines were honest and ordinary.
Again I do like the poem. Keep writing. You stated you wanted criticism and advice. Tony

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this poem very much.

When I created the contest, I was expecting poems on lost love or a lover missing another and such stuff. This is different. I like that.

Then again, this is a very honest write. When we don't have anyone to go the movies with or dine with, we start questionning ourselves...there's that "something wrong with me" feeling.

Why am I so unlikable, so hated and unwanted? Am I that bad?

_ can't get more honest than this.

Of all the submissions I've read so far, this is undoubtedly one of the best.
Good luck.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i really hope u didnt actually ask urself that lol... but i think ull win that was really good... and sad lol

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very descriptive. I like the lines you used in this one.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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