All the idle words

All the idle words

A Poem by lunatalia
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My first work here.

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I was standing here before, 
esta noche but still I'm scared by the view.
Could you please wait for me this time?
esta oscuro I can't feel you, I can't reach you

Then they're taking
I see them  in front of me
curse the idle words
should I be quiet?

Explode tiny pieces in my head
and then I watch behind me one more time
nada te detiene but I'm afraid of falling
the shattered view of you above me

Then they're taking
I see them  in front of me
curse the idle words
should I be quiet?

Desvaneciendose lentamente
contemplando tu figura indeleble... 

please stay this time
i don't want to fall in the dark
but I'm not that strong
I want to feel you close to me

© 2010 lunatalia


Author's Note

lunatalia
The parts in Spanish are the ones that the choir is singing behind.

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I really love this poem, I think that it has a nice flow and very good word choices. I especially like the parts that are in Spanish, because they make the poem stand out. I like how you don't give away the entire situation, and instead you leave it up to the audience. I hope that helped!
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Chaos Rain

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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I love that! Sometimes I write "Spanglish" poems. I think it should be a rising genre. Very cool. =^-^=

Posted 9 Years Ago


I really love this poem, I think that it has a nice flow and very good word choices. I especially like the parts that are in Spanish, because they make the poem stand out. I like how you don't give away the entire situation, and instead you leave it up to the audience. I hope that helped!
Love,
Chaos Rain

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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lunatalia
lunatalia

La Paz, La Paz, Bolivia



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I have sort of insomnia. I like to take very long walks in the night or when the sun is gone in afternoons. I love music and I'm the singer of a little band. I like to write rather than speak, I'm a b.. more..

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