the single tear drop.

the single tear drop.

A Poem by luviva
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its just i dnt knw... just read en love it if u can

"
that single teardrop
it only comes when i think
real hard about it

thinking of what i lost
moving away from the people 
i have know, the people who have loved me

i belonged to them and they belonged to me
i felt there love even when they were away
just can't bear o think about it
as i go to sleep, thinking about it

i just wipe it away
consoling my self 
that one time one day
i will be back to them

and they will embrace me just like 
they did, en just like that 
i will be their's again
and them, mine forever
never to part...

© 2012 luviva


Author's Note

luviva
just love it... en any constructive ideas r welcome, thanxx again

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I loved it. Sometimes we have to think hard to be able to cry. Thats actually sad. Not even having the luxury of tears only pain.
Wonderful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thanxx...:D
I appreciate the way you capture your feelings, the structure is well constructed. But many atimes make it more poetic rather than prose formate.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

luviva

11 Years Ago

lesson learnt!!,
thanxx for the review
real constructive!!
you talk about belonging to a family/community in such a nostalgic, endearing way

you also talk about missing these bonds in such a vivid, emotive fashion.....

you need to correct your slight spelling errors, otherwise I think quite a powerful recollection, thanks.

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you so much for the review
< _ >
heart felt :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

well thanxx
Apart from the typos, its grand. !

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you"!!
Touching. I really love how this can apply to a lot of different situations. Great work once again!

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you...:D
Yes, the process of crying oneself to sleep...I am all too familiar with it. You have a few typos, dear. Just type a little slower, and be more careful, and then your poems will be perfect!

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you, i will try my best with the spell checkss!!
very sweet and nice. very hard to be apart from those with whom we like to be. our hearts are then like a volcano about to explode with all the lave it has inside. i hope nobody would be apart from the people they love, i know it is impossible, but..what else to do? thank you for the nice weet poem..it is a feeling provoking poem..

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thanxx for that!!
reall appreciate it:D
khalid

11 Years Ago

my pleasure
just love it... okay
nice piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you...
i do love it. its very good

Posted 11 Years Ago


luviva

11 Years Ago

thank you

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Added on October 15, 2012
Last Updated on October 28, 2012
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luviva

KENT, Gillingham , United Kingdom



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