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A Poem by Mister T.
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It's so important to have a place of calmness and repentance, a place where your inner self can get some rest.

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As my legs push forward
forward and onward
My blood keeps going faster
in and out of my heart.

I can see the lights in the houses
smell the smell of their foods
Feel the heat coming from the fireplace
hear their laughters and good moods.

My fingers are frozen solid
by the icy breeze
My body soaked with rain
from my neck to my knees.

I know my destination
a place of peace and love
Which is just so perfectly
worth all of the above.

© 2016 Mister T.


Author's Note

Mister T.
And yeah, this is my first piece of writing since... Well, who knows?

Hopefully you enjoy this little piece of poetry :)

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First of all: welcome back! I'm glad to see that you found the time and/or will to do some writing again.

It's a great poem too, I especially loved the last line. At first I thought it might have been about someone who didn't have a home, or at least not a nice one, envying the people who do, but it's just that they are on the way home.

One small suggestion: You might want to change "from neck to knees" to "from my neck to my knees". I feel like that would improve the flow, but maybe that's just me.

Anyway, great work, glad to see you wrote something again.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mister T.

7 Years Ago

Hey man, thanks for the welcome back xD

That sounds like a fair suggestion, never rea.. read more



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This poem warms my heart--no pun intended. I really love the way you can paint a picture very vividly and then send it all home with a very strong, yet sometimes deceptively simple message. Thank you so much for sharing, it is truly a treat to get to read your work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


First of all: welcome back! I'm glad to see that you found the time and/or will to do some writing again.

It's a great poem too, I especially loved the last line. At first I thought it might have been about someone who didn't have a home, or at least not a nice one, envying the people who do, but it's just that they are on the way home.

One small suggestion: You might want to change "from neck to knees" to "from my neck to my knees". I feel like that would improve the flow, but maybe that's just me.

Anyway, great work, glad to see you wrote something again.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mister T.

7 Years Ago

Hey man, thanks for the welcome back xD

That sounds like a fair suggestion, never rea.. read more

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Added on November 25, 2016
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Mister T.
Mister T.

Netherlands



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My name is T, I'm 17 years old and I live in the Netherlands, and I want to share my stories with others. I'm in no way a professional writer, I just write what feels good. I'd like feedback from othe.. more..

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