Sonnet IV

Sonnet IV

A Poem by magic wall tree
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Another sonnet that seems ready for reviews

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Well, hello! Greetings! I come from afar,

With pale withered limbs and quivering jowls,

I cast my lot with you to find a good bar,

That we can get drunk and sleep through the howls.

 

Greetings indeed, contact is established.

Loading the database, loading promptly.

Image not found, please input it yourself.

To start over simply answer agree.

 

This critter tain’t man, get my musket, Bill

I’ll blow off his noggin’ and stick swords in his bottom.

But wait, ‘tis shiny, not gold but with skill

Could fetch a fair price, come ‘round this autumn.

 

Concept acknowledged. Don’t try to steal this

Station. Power supply dis-... warning ... hiss-

© 2011 magic wall tree


Author's Note

magic wall tree
I particularly hate the fourth line. Any suggestions to fix this would be appreciated. Maybe 2 and 4 should be changed. And also 3, 7, and 9-13. Maybe it's not ready for review, but review it anyway!

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Added on October 14, 2011
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magic wall tree
magic wall tree

Houston, TX



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I recently started taking writing more seriously (fiction and plays with a little bit of poetry). I am a musician/composer/improviser and I sometimes do visual art. I'm currently exploring how to inco.. more..

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