Romeo

You are my Romeo,
Please let me be your Juliet.
You're worth the gamble,
That's something I am willing to bet.
Your soul is where I belong,
I've waited a lifetime.
I've waited for so long.

My heart was an ice cube,
A solid mass of hate.
A tornado of pain,
A sad despite case.

Your smile became my drug,
It falls like rain on my lips
I get drunk on your words,
I dream of your hands upon my hips.

I cannot tell you how much your care has impacted me,
Or how much less you've made me hurt,
How much you've guided me,
Or how much you've always meant.

You are my warm summer breeze,
The one I want to hide with under the shade of the trees.
The one I turn to,
Someone I know I'll always want.
You are my Romeo,
Will you let me be your Juliet?

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Very honest and captivating piece with awesome word play. I am giggling :) lol. thanks for sharing this piece.

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Thank you :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)

[unsavable_soul]

I really love the line "It falls like rain on my lips".
Great passion in your conveyance.
Thanks for this.
Chris

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

I felt very strongly about how I wanted this poem to be perceived. I feel that I executed that relatively well.

[unsavable_soul]

Indeed you did. It's a very solid piece.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Chris

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Thank you :) I am working on getting more added soon

[unsavable_soul]

I'll be waiting believe me...

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Aww...well thank you! :)

[unsavable_soul]

Oh' hope you don't mind but I subscribed.

[Steven]

Romeo and Juliet indeed, deep, sincere, romantic, and extraordinary. I love the flow and the carefully painted pictures you portrayed. Very nicely written, Every Romeo must find his Juliet..

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

I appreciate your feedback very much! There was a very specific scenario that was in my head when this was written and I had hoped to catch it.

[OBWhiteHawk]

Oh I like this very much so romantic.

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Thank you. The intention was to not only capture the romance, but also how 2 people can be star crossed

[OBWhiteHawk]

You did a good job of that. I wonder if it's good to be star crossed or not though. Sometimes people can loose themselves if their not careful.

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

I believe love is as destructive as it is powerful

[OBWhiteHawk]

I agree and maybe the destruction is what makes it powerful and visa versa.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Wow!, interesting poem, it remind me of own poem on Romeo. I appreciate the free verse. the language is simple but have and intensity to carry the readers mind. The imegery love is well capture. Ane is as if you are pleading for a lover to come to occupy a vacumm. well done Mande.

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Thank you very much. This poem was written very quickly and off the top of my head. I'm sure it has room for improvement, however, it isn't bad. You are absolutely correct. It is a plea

[OneStrangeVibe]

i don't know what to say...honestly that was amazing..
you earned sincerity(:

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

That was a writing done in a moment of terror. Lmao. It did me a world of good. :)

[OneStrangeVibe]

i can tell. i love it

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

Thank you