Samurai's  Fall

Samurai's Fall

A Poem by Marc Marlon Villaflor

 

Cry while you have tears

Mourn my departure tonight  

 

Surrender your faith

 

When the spring comes tomorrow

 

Oh my fearless samurai

© 2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor


Author's Note

Marc Marlon Villaflor
This is not Haiku it is Tanka a Japanesse poetry dates back almost 1200 years ago.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I love the piece overall, as this is my first time reading a Tanka (though I am familiar with it in the formatting sense) I shall do my best. I read this almost as a conversation between the samurai who is going to leave off to battle for his lord in the spring and talking about it with his wife. With the first 4 lines being him, and the last line being her reply.
You did a great job sticking to the form! Finding great words that fit the form and make it flow. Much respect to that. My favorite line, "Surrender your faith" Good job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

Thank you for sharing this, its wonderful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Hester, I appreciate your review it means a lot to me.
I like the imagery and how it was technically sound.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Brother it is a lovestory of Shinobi NInja and Samurai warrior. glad you like it. thanks for .. read more
I like this one a lot. It sings to the heart of a warrior.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Ice, thanks for the review, this is a loverstory of two warrior.
Good job with the Tanka form! An interesting story told as well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Ms. Rita :) your words always an inspiration :)
Not bad. The form is technically correct and you have a good concept. The first line is the best one. Good work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Tri, your words is always a wisdom and I appreciate it. I am very thankful for your precious .. read more
Well done from a priggish a*s!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

I did not expect your well done, because I learn all the time from your review thanks a lot Sir Gera.. read more
Gerald Parker

9 Years Ago

Er.... I don't know what 'surrender your faith means.' Puzzled. P. A.
Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

It is about love story of shinobi princess ninja warrior and the samurai warrior. She ask him to be .. read more
Wow, this was beautiful. A great Tanka, Marc.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks N.H glad you like :) this is my first attempt just bear with me :)
s y e

9 Years Ago

It's good, no need to 'bear with you'
Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

lol :) thanks N.H :)
Yup it is a tanka indeedy! Nice Marc

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Mr. John :) yehey!
nice tanka..there is a certain mysterious feel to it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Mr. Jacob your words always an inspiration.
A beautiful poem. Asia had great writer's and Poet's. I tried to find their work. I enjoyed the poem. Good to look from the point of view of other places and cultures. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thank you Sir :) glad you like and I am inspire by your words.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

525 Views
24 Reviews
Rating
Added on April 10, 2013
Last Updated on April 10, 2013

Author

Marc Marlon Villaflor
Marc Marlon Villaflor

DIFC Dubai International Financial Center, Dubai City, United Arab Emirates



About
I am just writing for almost 2 months now and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank y.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..