Samurai's  Fall

Samurai's Fall

A Poem by Marc Marlon Villaflor

 

Cry while you have tears

Mourn my departure tonight  

 

Surrender your faith

 

When the spring comes tomorrow

 

Oh my fearless samurai

© 2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor


Author's Note

Marc Marlon Villaflor
This is not Haiku it is Tanka a Japanesse poetry dates back almost 1200 years ago.

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I love the piece overall, as this is my first time reading a Tanka (though I am familiar with it in the formatting sense) I shall do my best. I read this almost as a conversation between the samurai who is going to leave off to battle for his lord in the spring and talking about it with his wife. With the first 4 lines being him, and the last line being her reply.
You did a great job sticking to the form! Finding great words that fit the form and make it flow. Much respect to that. My favorite line, "Surrender your faith" Good job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Strong Tanka for a brave warrior...nicely pen'd Marc.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Hai Frie domo arigato :) I will give you a hot mushroom soup for this. lol but you are far lol.
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Yay. :-) My pleasure sir.
Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

:)
This is nice. According to the police, it follows the 5-7-5-7-7 format. I also have one (Rain). Congrats, kabayan. Hehe.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Lol :) thanks Tanka Police you have a new badge now, thanks Dhaye glad to have you here always suppo.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

9 Years Ago

You're always welcome.
It's sweet. Whatever it is.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

sorry I am referring for she I hope you wont confused. lol I have a typo
Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

It is a about the two warriors the shinobi ninja warrior who invades the camp of samurai but she reg.. read more
Junert

9 Years Ago

It's perfectly clear.
meaningful Tanka with significance, nice write

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

9 Years Ago

Thanks Ency, I know you are great in Japs Poetry just bear with me :) lol

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Marc Marlon Villaflor
Marc Marlon Villaflor

DIFC Dubai International Financial Center, Dubai City, United Arab Emirates



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I am just writing for almost 2 months now and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank y.. more..

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