The Rage Against Poseidon (RAGE TANKA)

We can't judge right away unless we know the backstory.

 

 

Her lips hex venom

Diabolic mind paints gore

Gives  horrific death

Crawling in the underworld

Rage is inexorable

Author's Note

I wrote this poem to give voice for Medusa one of the character in Greek mythology. I have this thought to give voice for her rage after Poseidon rape her and Athena turned her into a monster. I think she deserved a voice.

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

There is a based mythological aspect to this, (brought in though the title specifically, and then later on with use of "the underworld") that the captures imagination, and brings colour and visualisation to the fury and torment you portray. This said a lot, brought little - well done

[Ohhhwillow]

Someone has been watching Clash of The Titans haha!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is a rage of Medusa after Poseidon rape her and Athena turn her into monster, in the realm of Hades. Thanks Willow glad you drop by and give this beautiful insights.

[Ohhhwillow]

I know the story heehee, it' no problem, anytime!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow :) we really connect when it comes to great mythology :) thanks Willow.

[Peter H]

wish i knew more of greek mythology but you described her rage pretty well to me

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. Medusa deserved to have a voice.

[Veronica Chandler]

We all need a voice...including the mythological creatures. We hear about her from the perspective of her as a "Monster" often. Her origins were different than how she ultimately ended up. The same can be said for us all...we started somewhere which brought us to where we are now. Well done

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi Ronie, I believe in same thing, thanks for your precious time reading my work.

[Veronica Chandler]

My pleasure...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Medusa is a sad part of mythology. I mean, she was someone who was horribly wronged and had her life ripped away from her in a most violent way...why would we not expect her to be a vengeful soul after that? An apt write, my friend.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Girl, giving her a voice I think is a good thing to do, to know her backstory :)

[sedatezoe]

tanka is just one of the most challenging forms of classic japanese poetry buddy..i admire you for choosing this form.upon first glance on your poem .your readers can surely determine what your poem means and that is "rage". but please be reminded that the words you pick to put on the poem with this form is completely challenging..furthermore, strictly speaking, tanka and other japanese classic poems use its words connotatively..which result totally puzzles every reader it encounters.keep writing buddy.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for your wisdom :) I really appreciate it. I will consider your suggestion. Thanks again.

[sedatezoe]

your welcome.:)

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent Marc. The words fit the subject and show the anger very well.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ken, I just give voice to Medusa :)

[Sami Khalil]

I agree with the other reviewer about the mythological aspect of this piece. A stunning one...Keep penning...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. :) I appreciate your time.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Dakshta]

wow another really nice write :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Friend, it is a voice of Medusa :)

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauge..]

I absolutely adore this! It's so simple, but very satisfying! I am huge into Greek Mythology and culture so seeing this is great. I am glad you spoke from her view. I haven't seen many. She was such a tortured soul and had so much rage! Excellent job!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mande, hearing your precious review mean a lot to me. yeah I agree giving her a voice is the best thing we can do, she really a victim and her rage is believable.

[Mande ThaBoss BabyGauges]

No problem! Continue the work! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) thanks

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I wrote this poem to give voice to Medusa one of the character in Greek mythology. I have this thought to give voice for her rage after Poseidon rape her and Athena turned her into a monster. I think she deserved a voice.

[gombeggar]

change it to 'her hips'

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :)