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She looked at the deer.

The antlers.

Sharp. Unforgiving.

She just wanted a baby.

In the midst of a cold season.

Summer can sometimes be cold.

Not winter.

Unknown season.

One of the three counterparts.

Male. The deer.

She wanted a baby.

Drinking from a mug.

Chocolate perhaps?

Maybe alcohol.

Maybe both.

The deer walked among tall grass.

She wanted a baby.

Not a baby; a child.

Are they the same?

One turns into the other?

Does a man turn into a child?

The deer leaves, worried.

Concerned with a mate or river currents.

He comes, wearing a sweater.

Are you alright?

Out of shame she says of course.

Or for the sake of a beast called pride.

I am well and you?

I am about to fix you breakfast.

Gladly she says and blinks.

The deer disappears.

Into the forest of a hope.

Reviews

[Gee]

Lost me on this one. Can say this though men never truly grow up, we’re all big kids at heart

[emmajoy]

'Out of shame she says of course. ~ Or for the sake of a beast called pride.~ I am well and you? ~ I am about to fix you breakfast. ~ Gladly she says'

Seems as if you've taken paintings from a book and placed them where they don't belong yet... make the words electrifying! You've created two views, two creatures, two desires and wrapped them fallibility. Your style of writing here, the short phrases, the to-ing and fro-ing of male/female creates a peaceful battle of wills.. wants..

[Marian Elizabeth]

Did you enjoy it?

[emmajoy]

Not in the sense of eating an ice-cream, no. It strikes me as having slighly mysterious layers, more intriguing than simply enjoyable.

[Marian Elizabeth]

That's fine with me. My purpose has been fulfilled then.

[Gee]

Purpose fulfilled, is that like stuffing a dolphin with fish ??

[Marian Elizabeth]

I guess lol

[Gee]

Hmmmm, thought so :)

[emmajoy]

Something fishy going on?

[Marian Elizabeth]

Hhmm... millions of things are fishy in this world. starting with fish themselves. Care to be more specific?

[Gee]

Eau de ‘ addock, a new fragrance by Channel ( English )
Good morning EmmaJ :)

[Marian Elizabeth]

Doesn't sound pleasant enough. What about Eau du Cigarette... Sounds like something I could own..read moreDoesn't sound pleasant enough. What about Eau du Cigarette... Sounds like something I could own..
Oops it kinda rhymes lol

[emmajoy]

Apart from my review having disappeared, Marian Elizabeth has been hijacked onto a mid-ocean factory ship! Behave yourself, Gee!

[Marian Elizabeth]

haha I will I will... thanks for the feedback