Fauteur de Trouble

my first villanelle

 

And he lost it all

Went towards the fray

Now he is bound to fall

 

To them he seemed so small

Told him he could not stay

And he lost it all

 

So he punched boys tall

Mean words he did say

Now he is bound to fall

 

Then he grabbed the ball

Told them he will play

And he lost it all

 

Thrown against the wall

He could not speak to pray

Now he is bound to fall

   

A steep penalty to pay

For demanding his own way

And he lost it all

Now he is bound to fall

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. I enjoyed doing this and look forward to doing more difficult villanelles.

Reviews

[Prose-full]

"Thrown against the wall
He could not speak to pray
Now he is bound to fall
A steep penalty to pay
For demanding his own way
And he lost it all
Now he is bound to fall"---------------i like this. i love the visual you 'give'..very nice mary..

[Melissa]

I really liked it.