Blue Lagoon

Blue Lagoon

A Poem by Markus Anthony
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Inspired by a beautiful, drunken memory.

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My fingers paint icing on your face
And you stare at me for a second
And fix your gaze
The music, the chatter
The drinks passing over.
A spoonful of cake
You sent to my mouth
Part chocolate, part chiffon
The sweetness dissolved
Mixed with alcohol.
As the moment came fast.
And spontaneous.
That with Blue Lagoon in our heads
We steal brief, minute moments
To look at each other straight in the eyes
For in sobriety we can't.
With drinks
We can.

© 2020 Markus Anthony


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Markus Anthony
You don't need to relate. I'd like to know your thoughts, poetry-wise. Bless your day.

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Old wise saying. When drunk, we show the real face and we say real words. I liked the place, the situation and the ending.
"For in sobriety we can't.
With drinks
We can."
The above lines. I have known often. Thank you Markus for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Oh how drink can loosen the tongue and our inhibitions. I envisaged this scene taking place. What a delicious moment. That spoonful of cake, one to almost die for. Conveyed beautifully Markus Anthony. Keep well.

Chris

Posted 1 Week Ago


You're dating yourself with that movie reference, Markus. I remember it well (I'm old), and it was a bit risque at the time. While the movie is a good reference point, this is a scene much deeper and more complex than a Hollywood script.

What I read is two people trying desperately to re-connect, and what a good way to start... sugar and booze! We're certainly more relaxed and less inhibited under such influences. Of course, we know, even then, the buzz doesn't last nearly long enough. Sobriety is perhaps the truest measure of a relationship's strength, and this poem does more than hint at that truth. Remarkably good work, Markus.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Markus Anthony

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your review. Blue Lagoon is actually the name of the booze haha.
R.E. Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Ah! Don’t I feel like an idiot now! Well, drink up! The poem is even better knowing that.
To me, this is the perfect balance between telling a story in a straightforward way and also decorating it along the way with some lyrical & poetic expressions. I could've gone for something a bit more poetic at the end, tho . . . this feels a little too analytical. The word "sobriety" is so technical. It would be nice to use a euphemism for drinking, a metaphor, like . . . with an elixir, we can! Something like that. But even as it is, it's an honest relatable moment in time (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Markus Anthony

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your analysis. You've always had the best words. I will take note of your comm.. read more
Old wise saying. When drunk, we show the real face and we say real words. I liked the place, the situation and the ending.
"For in sobriety we can't.
With drinks
We can."
The above lines. I have known often. Thank you Markus for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is interesting, makes me think of two people who used to be together...still have somewhat of a physical chemistry, but need the drinks in order to overcome the mental and emotional roadblocks they have created with one another.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 17, 2020
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I'm Markus, a struggling medical student who loves to write poems based on romantic impulses and personal experience. On my own from markanthony.celestial on 8tracks Radio. more..

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