The Latest Soiree

A northern breeze ghosts over the lake,
The moon sits still over the trees -
Spring has come early.
 
Fallen blossom is scattered amid the cocktails and
Shiny gold ribbons -
He listens to the singing in a giddy haze.
 
Across the flagstones, stilettos
Click their way toward him.

One ribbon is now resting soft,
An evening dress undone.
For this woman’s sake, he admires also her skin -

Her fair complexion will pass as time drifts by.
 
Near sunrise
He leans alone on a fountain wall.
The lake, as himself, now calm -
Waits to be moved once more.

Reviews

[Corset]

I read this last night and posted but it didn't take. The images of the lake seems to lift a ghostly mist although it doesn't say that, it has the wonderful sounds of a party in the distance, and then she draws near, as if magically transported to him, but The line "for this womans sake he also admires her skin" as if he has many women and with each he adores something about each one, like a dracula or predator he consumes and then waits for the next. Very enticing, the sounds and atmosphere are so tangible.

[Allen Smuckler]

Beautiful...captivating...
classic first line Rosa 'a northern breeze ghosts over the lake' I can see the mist.
sets the tone for the write...glorious, vivid imagery and coloring throughout...
terrific use of metaphors..
'as the lake waits to be moved once more"
as am I
allen

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Vividly portrayed! Nice work :)

[Mickey Hilts]

a vivid scene of emptiness, of looking for something maybe unobtainable, again a great write

[Kayla]

This is so beautiful. This tells such a story of romance from an outsider's perspective.

[Ruth]

This is ethereal beauty! Wow :) Made my senses reel actually...divine imagery love, there is such a sweet lingering to this but also, a sublime melancholy, all in a moment to be lured again, anticipated, wonderful poem!
xoxo

[Lina Grey]

Excellent imagery and attention to detail. This poem really came alive as I read it. Thank you.

[Owlgirl]

Beautiful imagery, you painted the scene clearly in my mind using words. I love all the little details you used to help bring the emotion and mood in the poem alive, like "a *northern* breeze *ghosts* over the lake" it's a spectacular poem!

[Marie]

Beautiful imagery, both of the party and spring--an intermingling.

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. some men are so lost ... living between "moving" moments ...
. beautifully written ...