A Great Confidant

A Great Confidant

A Poem by maryjaneuy
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For my sister. ;)

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            Juicy gossips you always bring.

            On my side you always sing.
            A great sister you've been,
            No doubt if to you I always lean.


            My little vanities to you I always tell,
            Absolutely you always listen very well.
            Reliable we are to each other,
            Indeed you are my confidence-booster.
            Even you always tease me, you are such a great confidant.

© 2010 maryjaneuy


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Very nice...but don't you think this site is boring...?

Posted 14 Years Ago


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cute

Posted 14 Years Ago


cute, I really like it. Good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Good….
Beatifulll…
Candid…..
Nice nie nice....


Posted 14 Years Ago


lovely dedication 4 ur sister... i loved it truly... i wish i too had one!!! But u shud hav rhymed the last stanza as well... it ud hav bin mayb better then...
But seriously dis is so SWEET!!! :)))

Posted 14 Years Ago


I LOVE IT!!!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Aww, how sweet! I could tell from reading this that you love your sister a lot, and I think that writing a piece about something so personal to you really made it that much more heartfelt, and that much more genuine. It's been a long time since I've read a decent acrostic poem, so this really exceeded my expectations. Great work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Cute.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I won't ask if you want the bad new or the good news first, because peope always get depressed by that, cuz no matter how good the good news are the bad news are a damper..

I like that you write such nice words about your sister, so openly, and that you have a person like that to confy in. The words you tell seems to be chosen lightly but in this way it doesn't seem all that forced. You play very well with her name and it's good how you enhance the first letter of the sentences so people understand you are writing about your sister and her name.

On a nother note, when it comes to poetry it 's a big no-no to mix with the building the way you have. Some times it works, but this time I'm sorry to say it doesn't. You rhyme the last words of every sentence in the first stanza but not in the last. Though this isis a nice poem, I have to admit I liek some of your other work more. But I say 'keep it up' because no one is born a genius..they are bread over time.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice mixing of words and lines to form the name of your so loving sister with the first letters!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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