Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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Great write. I enjoyed it

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. :)
Pretty nice.
The flow is quite fine, and I like how you didn't shy from reusing the same lines.

Either way, the messege behind it is I suppose some people don't want help.
Some people want to just stay the way they are.

And that's quite fine.

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
The repeated lines fit the ballade form. ABABBCBC ABABBCBC ABABBCBC BCBC is the.. read more
Amazing write! Great passion and flow and word choice. Love love love this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Mary. :)
You are simply an amazing poet, Matt. Your work should be published in books, sold in stores. I almost never rate the poems that I read, just review, but I'm giving this a 100 because what could possibly deserve it more?

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Karen. :)
Have you tried this form? Its a fun one, only three rhyme sounds. One of.. read more
GreenShoes

4 Years Ago

You should be proud. It can be extremely challenging working within the confines of only three rhyme.. read more
mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Great! Can't wait to read it. I'll send you a mail. Ballad vs. ballade
mattavelli,

Amazing job here friend, you wrote emotions gorgeously. I felt some anger and sorrow. "My dark mind's torn and hardly sane", that's so beautiful. Keep up the good work.

Best regards,
Tristesse

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. :)
WOW!!!! This is amazing. Great job. I love it. Perfect example of a Ballade.

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Hi, Jed, thanks for reading. :)
I had a lot of fun with this one. Do you have a ballade poste.. read more
JBoone

4 Years Ago

I don't but I will work on one to share.
mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Great! That form got me hooked on complex rhymes.
Wow! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Metaphors and imagery come to you so naturally. I think this is a great poem. To me it sounded a lot like it was about what happens when one has been bested and their pain is basically big and bad enough to consume whatever little hope that may come their way. Youve done a great job with the rhyming (Ive noticed that youre kind of a purist that way). Keep up the great writing! I want to read more of this awesome stuff!

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Hi, Lee, thanks for reading. :)
I like to rhyme. Haha
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A very nice poem, Mattavelli.

Well written, excellent rhyme structure and flow, and a very well worded piece overall.
Anger and resentment abound in this write. It seems to be referring to a girl, however on a second read, i am not so sure. I can't quite put my finger on it. To be fair.
A very strong write. Nicely done.


Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, Doodley. :)
Yes, the girl is gone. He won't move on. He's in denial. He r.. read more
Very powerful. Barely contained anger, coming out as disdain.

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading. :)
Well, I don't know what I could say that others haven't already. It's great!
This ballad flows very well. It seems inspired. You have used some striking imagery here which makes it all the more enjoyable. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


mattavelli

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, Andronicus. :)

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