Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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Die-no-myte, Matt!
I could'na done much better, My Friend (if at all), and certainly not more creative … I definitely cotton to how you stuck to the theme throughout, traumatic and bizarre tho' it be — arrgh … LOL!
Check count in V1L4, and consider: "burning its vile way down and through", or some-such.
Spot-on rhymes, meter, and flow, and I cannot imagine anyone becoming bored while reading this one … ohhh-MY!
Seems you and Roland might have ate the same stuff before writing your Ballades, as they both are quite ugly, image-wise.
L1, Final Verse: Refrain from starting any full line with a conjunction … consider:
"Should there a doubt remain as to", or some-such.

I am ever amazed by that which you are able to make from the new forms I introduce to your pen, Matt … thanks a million for turning this one into a genuine smorgasbord of weird … LOL! 〜 Richard

(98/110 for those two snafus) :-P

Posted 5 Years Ago


Richard 🍃

5 Years Ago

"ville" is one syllable and needs to be set straight before you proceed to any new form, Matt.
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mattavelli

5 Years Ago

Ok, Richard. Changes made. I really liked "vile", but I couldn't find a vile = vī - el in a yahoo s.. read more
Richard 🍃

5 Years Ago

Matt, "noxious" is a good solution, and here is the way to handle that "And" issue:

S.. read more
often when i sit at my work table and start to sculpt a lump of clay what i intended to create becomes something entirely different...i talk about this in the poem, "UGLY GOLEM"...sometimes something lives inside the form that demands to be seen...well penned word tapestry, my friend











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Posted 5 Years Ago


mattavelli

5 Years Ago

Thanks, Jeannemarie :)
Excellent, Old Chap! Yes, we went the same route with this form; the ballade coaxed it out of us. Your C line is a lot more original than mine, though; it's the one I wish I'd thought of. There may be an error in your fourth line: it brought me to an abrupt halt, so I counted the syllables and it appears that one is missing. Apart from that, this seems perfect to me. I'll be interested to see what Richard has to say.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Roland Petrov

5 Years Ago

Ah, reading it like that works.
mattavelli

5 Years Ago

Richard made me change it.... Those dictionaries amount to "mob rule", Roland. I need a silky southe.. read more
Roland Petrov

5 Years Ago

I like it better now.
Well done my friend!!! why should a ballad not be about monsters! you are a wordsmith,,,I but a writer.

Posted 5 Years Ago


terry smith

5 Years Ago

write one about a boring boar and his mistresses three and of how such a pig as none was he.
terry smith

5 Years Ago

they could be called Topsey( the large breasted) , Turvey( the acrobat) and Curl my Toes( the s**t)... read more
mattavelli

5 Years Ago

Ooh, I like bacon.... May need to blow his house down. Muhahahahahaha

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