Fearlessly

Come on, my friend, embrace life's pain,
the heartbreaks, and your death to come.
Don't drench yourself in worry's rain
and drag through soggy days, so glum.
Go slam your dreams upon that drum
that rages in your chest so sure
as breaths you seize approach their sum
and fearless thoughts are all that's pure.

There's comfort in the wallowing
and moaning when life's oh so tough,
but poison's all you're swallowing
and tainted confidences bluff.
Don't fantasize that hope's enough.
Break free. The action is the cure.
Be willful and grind smooth those rough
and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure.

The world's a blaze and you a spark,
a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash;
so burn on 'til your skies are dark
and strangle time 'til moments flash.
And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler (Bad B..]

I like it! It unfolds like a ballad inspirational! great cadence and natural flow in the rhyme scheme and the message I find supreme good sir!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Bad bunny! :)

[Stella Armour]

Ah Matt my clever friend, this is almost another wonderful ballade, why did you not make it so ?

It stands well as it is and i like the message but oh, it would be a lovely ballade ..

[mattavelli]

Hi, Stella, thanks for reading! :)
Here I took some elements of the ballade form and left others. The rhyme pattern is similar, but looser with more sounds. The refrain only one word. And I left off the envoi. I like this one. I think it builds well and inspires.

[Stella Armour]

It does indeed and it is inspiring, i think because we have both written a ballade recently i noticedn the end rhyme pattern straight away lol
i like it too :)

[Chryiss]

"Bleed them pure" This phrase caught my attention. It's quite layered, at least in how I interpreted it in the poem or even on it's own. Blood usually taints, and pure is probably the last thing one would think in conjunction, so I liked this unexpected pairing of the two words.
The last stanza also stood out to me a lot. The beginning two lines were so pretty, especially the "soon smoke and blown out ash." In general though, this poem had some nice imagery.
Haha, I also just realized looking over it again that pure ends each stanza! Huh, interesting...
Nice work! :)

[mattavelli]

Thank you for reading, Chryiss. Fear taints. :)

[Arriam]

Go slam your dreams upon that drum
that rages in your chest so sure-

You've done just that here. I'm getting a more empowering "Dr. Seuss" sort of feel here, but you pen a very well-done inspirational piece.

[mattavelli]

Hello, Arriam, thanks for reading and the feedback. :)
I'm a fan of Dr. Seuss, but don't see him in this one. Haha... Is it the rhyming structure?

[VioletSerendipity]

This is awesome! You did a really good job of getting your point across in beautiful writing.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This is the only way to feel life in all of it's glory. My faith in God keeps me moving forward on this journey and I want to embrace all of it's wonder.

[Melbourne Bound]

"The world's a blaze and you a spark,
a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash"

By Jove, you've captured it perfectly.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, G! :)

[Melbourne Bound]

You certainly have not lost 'the spark' that you write so eloquently with..

[mattavelli]

Ugh, why are you awake? I passed out after dinner and woke up at 10pm. I'll zombie through tomorrow.

[Melbourne Bound]

I'm heading to work. Yay. :P Dinner must have been good. I like your bobble head. Is that really you? G'night, old friend.

[mattavelli]

I packed my gut with chicken and curry. Ya, that's me. Hey, where'd my hair go? Have a great day! :)

[Melbourne Bound]

I meant the bobble head! Did you have your own bobble head made?

[θεά]

This is an instant perk-up Matt. Very well worded and the rhyme seamlessly fits the mood. Enjoyable read. Well done.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Mallika! :)

[AlinaTheCacti]

Describes the word "Fearlessly" and "Courage" Perfectly. The quote: "Don't fantasize that hope's enough," will always be everyone's first choice of when everything turns into chaos, but NO. Hope is strong, hope is powerful, but there's always something that holds the hope in place. That plays a role to keep everyone's dreams alive. Which is Courage, fearless and bravery.

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[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Alina! :)
Hope and worry are the same. Actions make the difference. Example: Worrying it might rain and hoping it doesn't are the same. The action of carrying an umbrella isn't much trouble.

[JDAwesomeness]

I love this so much! It describes life so well and I can relate to everything that is said. I strive to fit this in life and I can't wait to read more of your writing. I'll review as many as I can!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, JD! :)