Come on, my friend, embrace life's pain, the heartbreaks, and your death to come. Don't drench yourself in worry's rain and drag through soggy days, so glum. Go slam your dreams upon that drum that rages in your chest so sure as breaths you seize approach their sum and fearless thoughts are all that's pure.
There's comfort in the wallowing and moaning when life's oh so tough, but poison's all you're swallowing and tainted confidences bluff. Don't fantasize that hope's enough. Break free. The action is the cure. Be willful and grind smooth those rough and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure.
The world's a blaze and you a spark, a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash; so burn on 'til your skies are dark and strangle time 'til moments flash. And, on that final breeze, you thrash, through whipping winds you won't endure, let all the gods proclaim you brash and fearless and a life so pure.
A really upbeat piece here, but also one that doesn't try to sugarcoat reality.. I especially like the part about embracing life's pain. Inwardly resisting that pain only makes it worse.
Posted 4 Days Ago
3 Days Ago
Thanks for reading, John! :)
Fear is the mind killer. Haha
I loved this! It's very well conveyed as Chris said, and the message here is true. It's okay to be sad but when you spend your entire life wallowing in your own sorrow and misery, it's torture for not only you but the people surrounding you. Action really is the cure- get up and do something, you won't regret it. Fear is the enemy and ruins so much around you... but only if you let it and your piece here, reminds us we're in control! For the most part, what we fear is nothing but a small, small thing in the grand scheme of our lives. Thank you for sharing!
Posted 1 Week Ago
1 Week Ago
Thanks for reading, Colacat! :)
I must have done a good job with this one, because you caught.. read moreThanks for reading, Colacat! :)
I must have done a good job with this one, because you caught my meaning perfectly. Haha
So well conveyed are these stanzas, also a poem with a great message. Been quite a while since I read you, so was delighted to find this one. Third stanza exceptional in its expression. All the best.
Written for someone you know, or is this a manual for how to handle the end of life in general? Either way, it's spot on in my opinion.
Posted 11 Months Ago
11 Months Ago
Thanks! :)
I pretty much write everything to my son now. This one came from my own experience.. read moreThanks! :)
I pretty much write everything to my son now. This one came from my own experiences, where I tend to think too much. I can give myself a good enough reason to do or not do just about anything. Fear is the mind killer. Haha
Ah Matt my clever friend, this is almost another wonderful ballade, why did you not make it so ?
It stands well as it is and i like the message but oh, it would be a lovely ballade ..
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Hi, Stella, thanks for reading! :)
Here I took some elements of the ballade form and left oth.. read moreHi, Stella, thanks for reading! :)
Here I took some elements of the ballade form and left others. The rhyme pattern is similar, but looser with more sounds. The refrain only one word. And I left off the envoi. I like this one. I think it builds well and inspires.
2 Years Ago
It does indeed and it is inspiring, i think because we have both written a ballade recently i not.. read moreIt does indeed and it is inspiring, i think because we have both written a ballade recently i noticedn the end rhyme pattern straight away lol
i like it too :)
"Bleed them pure" This phrase caught my attention. It's quite layered, at least in how I interpreted it in the poem or even on it's own. Blood usually taints, and pure is probably the last thing one would think in conjunction, so I liked this unexpected pairing of the two words.
The last stanza also stood out to me a lot. The beginning two lines were so pretty, especially the "soon smoke and blown out ash." In general though, this poem had some nice imagery.
Haha, I also just realized looking over it again that pure ends each stanza! Huh, interesting...
Nice work! :)
Go slam your dreams upon that drum
that rages in your chest so sure-
You've done just that here. I'm getting a more empowering "Dr. Seuss" sort of feel here, but you pen a very well-done inspirational piece.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Hello, Arriam, thanks for reading and the feedback. :)
I'm a fan of Dr. Seuss, but don't see .. read moreHello, Arriam, thanks for reading and the feedback. :)
I'm a fan of Dr. Seuss, but don't see him in this one. Haha... Is it the rhyming structure?
LIFE IS A PARTY. DON'T BE A PINATA.
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