Fearlessly

Fearlessly

A Poem by mattavelli
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Come on, my friend, embrace life's pain,
the heartbreaks, and your death to come.
Don't drench yourself in worry's rain
and drag through soggy days, so glum.
Go slam your dreams upon that drum
that rages in your chest so sure
as breaths you seize approach their sum
and fearless thoughts are all that's pure.

There's comfort in the wallowing
and moaning when life's oh so tough,
but poison's all you're swallowing
and tainted confidences bluff.
Don't fantasize that hope's enough.
Break free. The action is the cure.
Be willful and grind smooth those rough
and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure.

The world's a blaze and you a spark,
a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash;
so burn on 'til your skies are dark
and strangle time 'til moments flash.
And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure
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© 2016 mattavelli


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This is a wonderfully powerful read, and again, it seems that "you saved the best for last". --- "And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure." --- Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, JE! :)



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Shades of Dylan Thomas in this piece. Nicely composed, and a good message to boot! As you get older (like me) you take each day as it comes anyway, and accept it as a gift!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Robert! :)
I especially like the metaphor “be willful and grind smooth those rough and fearful thoughts. And bleed them pure.
Good stuff.
W.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, W! :)
"Do not go quietly into that good night..." Dylan Thomas would love this. Same defiant rage. Well written. I feel your passion.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading! :)
This is a wonderfully powerful read, and again, it seems that "you saved the best for last". --- "And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure." --- Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, JE! :)
This is fantastic! It's so hopeful and so wonderfully written, I love every line! x

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, L! :)
dearest Mattavelli… amazing poetry.
At 81 years, I have just begun to be a
Drummer with hummingbirds… so busy sipping Nectar and dancing with the flowers.
tenderly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, Patricia! :)
Last week I watched a documentary about hummingbirds on PBS... read more
Very moving poem, Matt. The last line especially really spoke to me. Very relatable now that I'm up there in years. You have a very strong writing style that elicits emotion from your readers. I always find that quality of writing important. It demands of the reader and challenges them. Wonderful work my friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and compliments, Carlos! :)

First of all I love the structure of this poem, the strong and soft word you choose to express your theme; Everyone suffers with sorts of pain at one time or another; I think what you're saying, work through this pain with action, what ever that may be; don't think that hope alone will solve your problems; you must go through hell and high water to cleanse and purify oneself. Don't ever give up. I thin the poem is extraordinary and upbeat. ..and I love your photo; are you talking to him?
Best, B.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, Betty! :)
Yes, the photo is my son. He's all I care about. Haha
Great lessons scribed for your boy, Matt ✍

One day, he'll pick up your book (dedicated to him, of course) and read this, marveling at his dad's poetical skill and keen wisdom.
With your hallmark rhythmic flow and spot-on rhymes, the a-b-a-b-b-c-b-cR scheme with the "pure" refrain (sans an envoi) is might-near a Ballade, and with a smidgeon of effort could easily be.
Still, one would be hard pressed to find issues to be critical of in this excellently rendered piece from your own heart and life's experiences to your beautiful son (love his handsome pic). 😊

Your writing's always a nice pleasure to enjoy … thank you sincerely for sharing! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and the compliments, Richard! :)
This one has a lot more rhyming sounds th.. read more
Richard🖌

3 Years Ago

Yeah,
You're right … now, that I look closer, V2 and 3 have a different rhyme scheme that V.. read more
Great meter! I love the optimism and positive message this poem has!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Years Ago

Thanks for reading! :)

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