Creeping Shadows

Creeping Shadows

A Poem by mattavelli
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I found a flower scorching in the sun,
a dreamt up passion fading in the flesh;
and stroked each tender petal, one by one,
'til both our souls were bare enough to mesh.

And so, we danced like whispers in the crowd,
cocooned within the threads of our desire.
While all that hectic world spun 'round so loud,
we nestled in a rage of quiet fire.

And now, the warmth we've shared seems in the air,
so thick the odd breeze beckons me to bask,
and moods that test the heart so often flare,
so here, dear reader, I will plainly ask-

If love is all it takes to make life shine,
then why are shadows creeping into mine?

© 2021 mattavelli


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mattavelli
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Very well-written, well-thought out poem based on well-percieved movements of the soul where passions, desires, illusions, fantasies gyrate, crashing on the sharp rocks of reality. Love has its own rules and laws, and these are hardly ever compatible with our petty daily lives. Love is a law, a force like gravity: impersonal and absolute. This is what I have to say in response to your request, "Please let me know what you think." Really great poem...really great.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading and your thoughts, Laz! :)



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Very well-written, well-thought out poem based on well-percieved movements of the soul where passions, desires, illusions, fantasies gyrate, crashing on the sharp rocks of reality. Love has its own rules and laws, and these are hardly ever compatible with our petty daily lives. Love is a law, a force like gravity: impersonal and absolute. This is what I have to say in response to your request, "Please let me know what you think." Really great poem...really great.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading and your thoughts, Laz! :)
I really enjoy an opening line that grabs you and yours captivates. i like it.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Hanks for reading, duff! :)
The title got my attention and to my pleasant surprise it was a sonnet. Shakespearean sonnet. I've been studying thanks to you. The poem is beautiful as well as well executed. And that twist at the end you were telling me about. I've been waiting anxiously for your approval of my sonnet.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

9 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, William! :)
I'll check it out.
Hello my friend.
"If love is all it takes to make life shine,
then why are shadows creeping into mine?"
The creeping shadows are always waiting for us. Life can be tricky. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

10 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Coyote! :)
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

You are welcome my friend.
I really enjoyed this, well written, and yes, shadows, well they do come with us no matter who we are with. We all come with baggage and it’s to be expected but the answer is to walk over them as if they are not there. They had there time.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

10 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Patricia! :)
"walk over them as if they are not there" -- that is lovely.
Patricia

10 Months Ago

Well it works for me, usually;) and I just noticed I wrote there instead of their LOL yep, I went to.. read more
this poem is so intriguing as you wonder where all the magnificent imagery is taking you and the ending line suddenly punches with a conclusive question that relates to many, each line has so much depth of ethereality.

"And so, we danced like whispers in the crowd,
cocooned within the threads of our desire.
While all that hectic world spun 'round so loud,
we nestled in a rage of quiet fire."
yet, these lines are pure enchantment.



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Dreamer! :)
Those shadows have a way of
sneaking in and surrounding a
relationship even the most solid
ones when you least expect it
stuff happens beyond our control

Nice Work Matt

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Fran! :)
I totally identify with this poem. A few years back I was in a relationship with a woman who I had known since we were teens. Through the years we had remained good friends. In our 30s we met up again. I had just ended a relationship and she was in one that was crumbling. There was this fire between us, pure raw intense and all consuming. I should have trusted my intuition but I didn't. I accepted my bad choice made in ruining the amazing friendship we once had. And in the end I felt those shadows that you speak of at the end of your poem. Amazing work Matt. Great writing should always ask the reader to ask questions of themselves, whether good or bad.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Carlos! :)
Ive pretty much lost all my friends to distance or disagreemen.. read more
Carlos Lorenzo Estrada

1 Year Ago

hahaha that only reflects her strong bound of love for you, Matt. And from your writing I can see w.. read more


........ a fine poem and then some sir ...
... Neville

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Neville!
Neville

1 Year Ago


............... welcome you are :)
A beautifully rendered poem with gorgeous lines throughout sir Mattavelli. You are waxing lyrical...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Sami! :)
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome sir....

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