Creeping Shadows

I found a flower scorching in the sun,
a dreamt up passion fading in the flesh;
and stroked each tender petal, one by one,
'til both our souls were bare enough to mesh.

And so, we danced like whispers in the crowd,
cocooned within the threads of our desire.
While all that hectic world spun 'round so loud,
we nestled in a rage of quiet fire.

And now, the warmth we've shared seems in the air,
so thick the odd breeze beckons me to bask,
and moods that test the heart so often flare,
so here, dear reader, I will plainly ask-

If love is all it takes to make life shine,
then why are shadows creeping into mine?

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Laz K.]

Very well-written, well-thought out poem based on well-percieved movements of the soul where passions, desires, illusions, fantasies gyrate, crashing on the sharp rocks of reality. Love has its own rules and laws, and these are hardly ever compatible with our petty daily lives. Love is a law, a force like gravity: impersonal and absolute. This is what I have to say in response to your request, "Please let me know what you think." Really great poem...really great.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading and your thoughts, Laz! :)

[Neville]

........ a fine poem and then some sir ...
... Neville

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Neville!

[Neville]

............... welcome you are :)

[Sami Khalil]

A beautifully rendered poem with gorgeous lines throughout sir Mattavelli. You are waxing lyrical...

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir....

[Betty Hermelee]

shadows are dark, it seems as though you have residual pain your being that needs to be choked, so that you may feel the fresh air, the sun, the flesh, the bond, the passion; people need some calm in their lives, and you show us here that shadows are the chaos and the sunshine is desire.
Well thought out piece, I enjoyed reading it
Best, Betty

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Betty! :)

[Pól]

I think you just need to give her one??

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Pol! :)

[Pete]

very good. i really enjoyed this. the answer is to never look down or only go out on cloudy days - love floats upwards ... :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Pete! :)

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Lovely sense imagery. Couplet at the end of the sonnet regarding shadows and light, asks a question many of us wonder. You expressed it beautifully.
S.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Sherri! :)

[Chris Shaw]

A sonnet and beautifully done too. Your beautiful flower, may not be destined to last. Better to have loved and lost. Shadows do have a way of spoiling happiness. Great work.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
Have you written any sonnets?

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, I have. Only a few. I will see if I can find one I have posted on WC.

[sharonlee]

How poetically your lines flow, with a lovely measure and lyric grace.
All things have a reason for being... even shadows, for without them how could we compare light from dark, or appreciate the beauty of life, if we have never experienced the shadows?
The blessing lies in knowing not to allow shadows too much control, knowing when to change direction and face your source of light.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading and your thoughts, Sharonlee! :)

[HadesRising]

Nice piece, enjoyed reading. Well Done.

[Stella Armour]

where there are shadows there has to also be light , the light of love far outshines the simple shadows life sometimes casts over us ..

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Stella. :)