My Caramel Sundae

I wrote this for the hottest chick of all time, hoping to get lucky.

 

In the land of hot chicks, there is a queen.

 

She’s the hottest chick I’ve ever seen.

I’ve seen a lot and I was amazed,

When that chick’s looks left me so dazed.

She nearly knocked me out, smiling in her way,

I’d like to see the rest someday.

 

She’s my Caramel Sundae

 

She’s a storm of sexy, tearing up the Earth

And she knows just what she’s worth.

With her innocent eyes and crafty wits

Man I’d like to grab her….

 

Sweet Caramel Sundae

 

You know I’d like to eat her cherry

But she makes me feel like Tom chasing Jerry.

I’ll chase her my whole life, because I just can’t let her pass.

I’ve got to grab a hold of her magnificent….

 

Oh, sweet angels of mercy don’t make me wait.

I want her on my dessert plate.

I need her now and this may sound corny,

But that chick just plain makes me horny.

 

Oh apex of women, I know you can hear me.

Now you know that I need you near me.

You stole my mind and my heart went following.

If you leave me now, you’ll leave me wallowing

In a broken life, with no hope for joy,

Why not just make me your lover boy?

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

I was smiling the whole time I read this. Fun to read finding the bounce in the rhythm easily. I hope this worked and you got to see all of her smile!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, William! :)

[BLitZeD]

Very well written. Love the Tom & Jerry reference

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Blitzed, this is an old one... figured id air it out. Haha

[Richard🖌]

Wondrously adventuresome into the realm of indirect eroticism, Matt.
Cute, suggestive, and metaphorical, I am sure you've curled a few toes with this one, and blown some stiffer minds, as-well … LOL!
I love it, My Friend, but it lacks flow in a lot of places; yet, seeing it is 7 (almost 8) years-old, I understand why it does, as your skills have definitely now improved past that point, so I'll not pick on those parts, which I am sure you can do for yourself, if you've the mind to.

Thanks, guy, for the great entertainment and several laughs, a few guffaws, and a knowing giggle or two! 〜 Richard

[R Smith]

lol Great! good humor mixed with passionate longing and your rhyming and flow are brilliant :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Haha! That was terribly sweet. I use terribly in a good way. :)
Young love is very special, crushes... I miss crushes...

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Cherry. I still get crushes, but my evil step-wife always puts a stop to them.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Lol! :)
I imagine they all turn to evil step-wives at times like that. :)
I sure as hell would too!

[mattavelli]

My wife and I have no secrets. Her opinion is I'm too lazy to make a cheating effort. Haha

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Guess lazy men are not so bad after all. :)
Plus, there's all that love and respect nonsense...

[mattavelli]

Yes, it's the love. :)
I have a history of being mildly irresistible and my stink of sexiness has drawn its fair share or prowling minxes, but I've been strong. I've seen my wife sad and didn't like it. I am a man who will fight for her honor. I am the hero that she dreamed of...

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Ah well, if not for the glory of love, what for then?

[mattavelli]

Agreed :).

[Roland Petrov]

You make eating a cherry preserved in sugar and artificial coloring on top of a mound of over sweetened discharge from bovine mammary glands sound sexy! That's a feat all on its own.

[mattavelli]

You said mammary. Thanks for reading, Roland.

[ANTO]

I could see Snoop singing/rapping this one Matt but he never would admit to needing a woman so maybe someone a bit less Alpha - who do you think - Kanye maybe?
The title is beautifully playful but ultra-romantic
Good writing !

[mattavelli]

Haha, maybe Rufus, from Bum Fights. Thanks for reading, Anto.

[ANTO]

Lmao - too funny
You're welcome Matt

[Matching Socks]

Lol! Cute! Did it work?

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Ana. Sadly, very little works for me.

[FLCJournPress]

Thank you for entering the contest. The poem is very nice and the meaning is direct which makes it quite easy to read. Its also funny yet quite thought provoking. By the way, this is PG13 XD

[AG]

wildly contemporary yet artful.

a 40s poetic pin-up that oozes with sentiment and sexiness.

kudos!