moonlight smoothie

moonlight smoothie

A Poem by Amidrea Ming
"

the most pleasant night drink

"

moonbeam rain

soft artemis twang

milky silver shimmer spill...


my liquid pearl 

melts

through the obisidian

& sycamore sighs

into my cup


it's my favorite drink

sprinkled with starlight and 

cosmic dusty dreaming of you


xx

© 2018 Amidrea Ming


Author's Note

Amidrea Ming
not sure how to develop this further... some random image wording i had floating around in my head became this poem

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This needs nothing more, for it has nothing more to say. The only thing I will suggest as a change is the "dusty dreaming of you"....it's a bit awkward in flow and image, and if "dreaming" is supposed to be a noun here, it's not completely clear in the line (there's something off about it that's not conveying that message). My suggestion:

"sprinkled with starlight
cosmic dust
And dreams of you"

That last line break really would drive it all home with respect to power.
But other than that, this is amazing! Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


OMA.....! Now I wish to get this drink!
A fine consumable of nature you made in this...loved reading😊

Posted 1 Year Ago


This can be perceived in so many different ways, that's the beauty of this write. I interpret it as the feeling of blood rushing through the body, the quivering of thighs (since you mention Artemis, the Goddess of the hunt) the edging of orgasm and the sensual feeling of love and lust entwined to form a euphoric feeling. Some dreams take us to places beyond our body and mind and let us imagine what it's like to play with the stars for a while, this poem sure takes me there. xox

Posted 1 Year Ago


Amidrea Ming

1 Year Ago

wow! i never looked at it like that but i certainly can now ~ thank you for your insight ^~*
emipoemi

1 Year Ago

......I'm not entirely sure how Artemis and the hunt can be associated with that, but she IS on a mi.. read more
I think some of the best poems come from "random image wording "as you wrote.. I really like this poem it's unique and imaginative...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amidrea Ming

1 Year Ago

you are too kind to read all my work

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20 i just write sometimes to cope with how i feel don't mind me, my depression, and my broken heart through writing and music, i hope to heal until then, welcome to my sadness more..

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