Never trust a poet

Never trust a poet

A Poem by MBUYISA
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i'm not this kind of a poet but this poem is about how poets can constract verses and with them....hypnotize people.

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Never trust a poet

 

I read between the lines

I am articulate and i hypnotize minds

My words can fool you

And seduce you to surrender

I paralyze souls; I'm a big time offender

 

Words, is all I have

Pretentious poet that I am

I wrote a poem once, and said its hers

She fell for it and said I’m hers

I flirt with words, not emotions

Love her not with affection

My love is but, a description

 

In writing; I sweep her off her feet

In words; I'm a man of her dreams

In deeds; I take her to my sheets

However fall in love with a poet, not.

 

© 2015 MBUYISA


Author's Note

MBUYISA
I am not that kind of a poet. This poem is about how poets can constract words and with them hypnotize people. Thank you for reading. uThokozani uyazibongela

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I like the poem especially the lines "I flirt with words, not emotions" and "In writing; I sweep her off her feet/In words; I'm a man of her dreams/In deeds; I take her to my sheets". But here are some of my corrections:

*I am articulate and hypnotize minds -> I am articulate and I hypnotize minds (parallelism)
*paralyse -> paralyze

And I see that you are fond of using commas to indicate a pause in thought or to introduce a dramatic idea. I suggest ellipsis or a double dash instead. I often find them better and more appropriate.

This reminds me of the poem I wrote a long time ago. It's entitled "Beware of the Writer".
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/SennahBorms/1303134/

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Posted 10 Years Ago


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MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you Arzel.....your reviews are appreciated. Can't wait to read "beware of the writer"



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I love this poem!! The rhyming was on point and carried the poem well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MBUYISA

8 Years Ago

Hi Savannah, Nice meeting you and thanks for your awesome review. I hope you wrote many poems becaus.. read more
Talent of writing is often does not translate to the purity of soul. Many a times people confuse words and action. They are mutually exclusive in most of the cases.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


I liked it because you came with this aspect..good job...but I hope the people to be like I find on writerscafe...there lies the beauty of poetry,,,:))

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Posted 9 Years Ago


We do get swept up by the sweet words of another...
I think a bit of caution is good in any relationship.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

True that Ana...
Your reviews are always appreciated
wow wonderful mr mbuyisa,


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MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading
This is going to be a firm favorite. How I love the true and candid expression of a poet's guile. The written word is often embellished and dramatized and those who have that gift will always have the upper hand on gullible, willing souls. This is a truly worthy read.

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MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

Thank you Divya, your reviews are always appreciated
Some can enjoy the magic and hopnotism while they can. Some can put you to sleep to get a reading too like Edgar Casey. A marvelous poem...:)...................

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Posted 9 Years Ago


MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

Thank you Sam
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)............................
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ron
Yes I think you are right about a poet using their words. I think if a poet writes from their heart and emotions and not from what is between their thighs the reader will know it.

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MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

thank you Ron
your review is appreciated
ron

9 Years Ago

Your welcome MBUYISA
this is beautiful...well penned

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MBUYISA

9 Years Ago

i'm glad you liked it....thanks for reading
// In writing; I sweep her off her feet

In words; I'm a man of her dreams

In deeds; I take her to my sheets

However fall in love with a poet, not. //

I loved these lines... Some people can do that without needing to do anything else, some people will fall for them because of their words and nothing else. Very well written, indeed.

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MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much noodlebumble
Your reviews are always appreciated

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