A Poem by Hot-N-Cold_17

I had a friend that I was really close to and he died this is for him. I love you


Here in the grass I feel the blades grazing my bare legs  

the silk of my dress feels like heaven while the golden sun

warms my milky skin. Feeling


You lay beside me and your breath warms my neck

sending chills of ecstacy running down my body. Feeling

the wind sweeps through the meadow carrying the scent of flowers

calming my racing heart. Feeling


Laying in my room the silence deafens me no one to soothe my pain

how to make it stop. I close my eyes and think of that meadow

with you and my feelings.


Then I cry myself to sleep because of feelings why did you have to die

© 2008 Hot-N-Cold_17

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Very emtionally. Well written.

Posted 12 Years Ago

A very passionate write. Nice flow. I'm sure you're friend wherever he is in heaven felt the same way.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Awww I'm so sorry :(

I like the poem! I felt like I was in the meadow :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I really like the way the poem begins. Love the imagery. The last verses are good as well, it could just do with some commas or clearer line breaks. There are a couple of run-ons there. But really a very good poem.

Sorry for your loss.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Then I cry myself to sleep because of feelings why did you have to die

I'm so sorry. It's hard to understand pain like that but you explained it really well. It was really deep. good job

Posted 12 Years Ago

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A Poem by Hot-N-Cold_17